Appie #5000[Asst App]

[--Kosuke]

Name:

Takashi


Age:

15[16 in 2 days prior the date of said application]



Gender:

Male



Desired Position:

Assistant


Experience:

Ex Staff of a Dead Naruto site x2 [Co-Admin-Global Mod]
Ex Mod of a Dead Dead Dead Bleach Site
Current Mod of Here


RolePlay Experience:
Team RP
Ramen Shop
Training
Leaf Event
Training As Takashi



Additional Comments:

(These are just somethings I thought you'd find in an application)

So you want to be apart of Staff?
Yeah, While in the beginning my activity was a bit shaky due to school problems, I've always actually enjoyed RP'ing on NFRP. Mostly my parents in the past have been strict as hell about computer time which caused me to barley be able to rp and as such long periods of inactivity. But you don't really have to worry about that because I dont plan to go inactive anytime school. ESPECIALLY since school now a days to me is like a walk in the park. I just personally had to study more. But not to go off tangent the reason I want to be staff is because I really do love helping. I've been staff on other sites long enough to know how to judge things correctly and not have impaired judgments. Just for example, If I were given the chance and passed and became an Assistant and lets say for example there's a question that I have an half answer to, I would before anything ask the moderator that is currently around about the answer however if I were to be the only staff member around then I would exhaust all possible research and give the member the best answer I could possibly give them.


That's nice and all but how are we so sure you want go poof?
Honestly I really dont plan on going poof. I have access to the site during the day when I'm at school and even before I get home. Since I live in New York and I specifically go to school near a populated area, There is a lot and I repeat ALOT of free wifi around. Not only that but I have access to most of my schools laptops and computers. The school staff did not lock down their Admin passwords too well for the laptops and since I need that to use the internet for those..Well I have it the passwords anyway. But to seriously not to go off tangent, I got a lot of mobile and computer access to the site basically.

We've seen you help but not all your info has been correct.
Yes, I know that might be a Area of concern but let me tell you that certain questions that I've gotten wrong, I always studied the the correct answer and double checked to where I went wrong when finding the answer I gave wrong. If there's one thing I think I know at heart I think it would probably be Character Creation. Yes it may be weird and I DO have a life but a lot of things in Character Creation are seared into my brain. Like literally It's just STUCK in my head. But to end my long statement, If I get something wrong I study it, If it is more than question being asked, I'll make sure that I at least answer 1 question correctly.

Just to put this out here, I do greatly appreciate which ever mod takes the time out of their busy schedule to review this. If I ever do get accepted I will try my hardest to do my job. I know the physical and mental strain it takes to be a staff member. Since I have a passion for helping, I really dont care how much PM's I get daily just as long as my position helps the person who needs whatever done..is well done. To be blunt, If I get accepted I'll do my job of course and I'll be happy to do it, If I get denied then I get denied, No hard feelings right? Because if i get denied then there's a reason for it and I just do what I've been doing this whole time, Helping when I possibly can. Honestly, HONESTLY It's really not about having the powers, While it would be nice to have it, It's all in the end the feeling you get when you've actually helped someone out. Yes I'm a weird person but I get a good feeling when I help people out. And again I thank whoever decides to look at it.

Edit: Just to add it, One of the better looking profiles I've made
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Edit x2: GM slots are filled no? With Runesaka taking slot 6 and Artemis becoming a new Assistant would mean that it's 9 and Roko is a new battle Mod. So the slots for that are filled.

[Koori.]

Edit: Just to add it, One of the better looking profiles I've made
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Edit x2: GM slots are filled no? With Runesaka taking slot 6 and Artemis becoming a new Assistant would mean that it's 9 and Roko is a new battle Mod. So the slots for that are filled.

Just wanted to point out that those two things are highly irrelevant to your app.

SPOILER: Click to show

Name: Tenshu Kenshin "skull kid."
Age: 22
Height: 5' 8
Weight: 161 lbs.
Gender: Male
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Birth Country: Water
Village: Waterfall
Special:

* Specialists: Medic Specialist, Taijutsu Specialist.
* Releases: Suiton, Fuuton, Hyouton, Open.
* Perception: Open, Open.
* Clans: Kaishin [Master], Open, Open, Open.
* Fighting Styles: Will of Kratos, Dian Xue Shu, Open, Open, Open.
* Misc.: Herbalist, Summoner, Sealist, Ritualist, Open.

Secondary Weapons:

75 Small Flashlights.

Primary Weapon:

Great Sword.

Personality:

Tenshu's personality is infact rather goofy. Its hard to express one self as a mute, which is exactly what Tenshu is. He cannot speak, and thus cannot communicate, or atleast very well. This is truly frustrating to the Genin, infact he almost failed out of the Shinobi academy because of it. However, most people find Tenshu quite hilarious. His delinquent acts are really something to behold. Goofy by nature, warrior by fight. He has been through many fights, which may explain the forever scars all over his face. Because of this he wears a mask, and thus reading his emotions is near impossible. This is not to say he has no emotion, but that knowing if one is being projected is highly unlikely. Towards other people he is extremely nice and fun loving, until otherwise shown something different. Tenshu will not hesitate to joke and make fun of people with sign language and with the materials around him even if he has just met you, its a good ice breaker, or so he feels. Even though scarred physically, he is not so mentally, as he is quite a good decision maker, especially under tough times and when all the chips are down. Tenshu enjoys pain, oddly enough, making him an odd Medic. He is often found doing experiments on himself furthering his knowledge within the Medic Tree. He isn't exactly a renown Doctor though, Infact he has been banned from most hospitals due to his ridiculously goof ball nature. Some people misunderstand him so much because he is a mute, that they will often times attack him, as well. He extremely prefers to be called "skull kid" rather then Tenshu. Just a pet peeve, really, people started calling him it, and being the borderline asshole he is, he enjoys it.

Appearance:



There isn't really much to Tenshu then there appears to be, his clothing is more so random then anything. He almost looks like a glorified farmer with a mask on. Starting from the bottom at the least complicated part of his attire, Tenshu wears a pair of leather shoes, rubber soled bottoms. The tips of these shoes, should be noted that they are pointed straight up into the air. The shoes are a little bit higher then his ankles. Above his shoes he wears a nice pair of black tights, nylon to be exact. Flexible, covers all areas, and allows good movement for the Genin. This doesn't really expose his junk though, because his shirt drops down below his waist area and to his upper thigh. Not to mention, he wears a pair of lengthy green jean shorts. The bottom of said shorts one could tell is supposed to to be full length, but is obviously ripped at the knees, as threads can be seen hanging down randomly.

Over his body, is completely covered by shirt and gloves etc. He wears a completely white T - Shirt hiding his charred and scarred body. It holds many cut, scratches, and bruises that he would rather have remained hidden on his skinny yet ripped body. These are from experiments gone wrong that he has tried to do to himself, and either failed, and succeeded, but with a price. Infact, most have actually come from battle. Regardless, he wears over that, a Red raggy button up shirt. The shirt is lengthy and noticeably too big for him. The sleeves are short sleeved and come down just barely past his elbows, and have many wrinkles within. It passes Tenshu's waist and goes down to upper thigh level. He wears a cloth belt (much like that of a karate belt) to hold the flaps down on his red button up. This keep it neat and doesn't cause annoyance upon moving. Over his hands, he wears a pair of green fingerless gloves to keep his fingers free for certain jutsu and the like. The back of the gloves go all the way up to his mid forearm area. This reveals a slight area of his elbow and leaves it exposed. Upon noticing this, his skin is a very very pale white color. It obviously almost never touches sunlight.

He wears the collar on his red button up popped open Possibly for flare. His head area is perhaps the thing that sets Tenshu over the edge appearance wise. The most notable thing is that weird heart shaped mask over his entire face. It has two incredibly large eye holes, although most is decoration, but the actual eye holes are still quite large. There are spikes protruding from the mask at certain point, going lateral to the mask. These are iron and colored purple to match that of the mask, which is also purple base in color. The eyes are Orange, with Green pupils, circled by a red outline. In total, there are ten spikes on this mask. Four on the bottom left, four on the bottom right, one on the top left pointing straight up into the air, and on on the top right doing the same. Their is a leather strap holding the mask upon Tenshu's face. His face, makes him look very girly, as per the Kaishin bloodline. Something that cannot be bypassed, unfortunately, which only furthers the mask argument. His hair is black in color, yet short, and ragged.

Bloodlimit: Kaishin - Water and Ice.
NinJutsu Techniques:

Suiton Soushi (Water Creation)
Rank: “D”

[/u], “C”, “B”, “A”, “S”
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: With this technique the user is able to create water from oxygen in the air for water techniques. When this water is created they can then manipulate the size and shape of the water, controlling it within their radius.
Special: This jutsu can be used as a source of Suiton jutsu without additional handseals.
Drawback: If the water is made for use outside specific jutsu or to manipulate the size/shape of water in their radius, then this jutsu requires handseals.
Description: By using their chakra a Kaishin member can manipulate the molecules in the air and allow them to take the shape and form of water. In doing so the user is capable of performing techniques that require a water source. The amount of water that can be made, as well as the radius depends on the rank of the jutsu. For D rank the user can create up to four cubic meters of water in a radius of four meters. At C rank eight cubic meters and a radius of eight meters. At B rank seventeen cubic meters of water in a radius of fifteen meters. At A rank thirty two cubic meters of water in a radius of twenty meters. At S rank fifty two cubic meters of water in a radius of thirty meters.
Limit: Must be of the Kaishin Bloodlimit. Must have Water Release.

Aisu Soushi (Ice Creation)
Rank: “D”[/u], “C”, “B”, “A”, “S”
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: With this technique, the user is able to create ice out of any source of water around them.
Special: This jutsu when combined with Suiton Soushi can be used as a source for Hyouton jutsu without additional handseals.
Drawback: The water source must be within their Radius. When controlling or Creating Hyouton outside of Hyouton jutsu then the user must perform the required handseals.
Description: By using their chakra a Kaishin member can lower the temperature around a body of water at an incredible rate to freeze the water into ice instantly; allowing for ice techniques to be used. In order to go into a rank of this technique a member must first learn the water creation technique of the same rank. If one wishes to train into the C rank Ice Creation they must first learn the C rank Water Creation technique and so on. The radius at which ice can be made depends on the rank of the technique. At D rank four meters radius. C rank eight meters radius. B rank fifteen meters radius. A rank twenty meters radius. S rank thirty meters radius.
Limit: Must have Water Creation Technique rank by rank. ex: D for D, C for C, etc. Must have Ice Release. Must be of the Kaishin Bloodlimit.

Kuri Buki (Ice Harden)
Rank: “D”[/u], “C”, “B”, “A”, “S”
Skill: Ninjutsu/Supplementary
Effect: In Description
Special: N/A
Drawback: Learning the ranks of the jutsu requires the specific class to be achieved.
Description: The understanding of this technique allows for a Kaishin user to truly harness the power of ice creation. This technique will determine how hard ice created is. The user must be the same class as the rank of jutsu they wish to learn. This means to learn the B rank version of this technique the user must be B class or higher and so on. At D rank the ice is as solid as regular ice. At C rank the ice is as strong as iron. At B rank the ice is as strong as titanium and cannot be melted with fire techniques below A rank. At A rank the ice is as strong as hard steel and can’t be melted by fire techniques below S rank. At S rank the ice is as strong as adamantine and cannot be melted by fire techniques. This technique is the base of all ice techniques used. The strength of every ice technique depends on this.
Limit: Kaishin Bloodlimit; Water Creation, Ice Creation

GenJutsu Techniques:

See Below.

TaiJutsu Techniques:

See Below.

History:

Where to begin? Tenshu was born within the land of taki no kuni, the land of grass. Not many people knew what exactly had happened to his parents, and still to this day, the ones that did are mosly all dead. All Tenshu knows, is he grew up an orphan. That was rough, it always is rough to grow up with a step family, people that you can't seem to connect with, especially as a mute. It wasn't until he was about 9 or 10 that his step family had revealed to him what had happened.

One night about nine years prior, Tenshu's parents, Shiro and Karin, were murdered in cold blood in his house. Assassins, or atleast it was alwasy thought to be, were hired to kill these highly trained thiefs. Tenshu's parents, growing up and living within taki were renown thiefs and hired to do alot of small arms robberies. Alot of people considered them to be somewhat evil people, stealing from whoever just to make a couple bucks from a company or the village. They were indeed respectful folks still though, that never seemed to change about them. Well, one night prior to their deaths, they had apparently gone off on a village mission to steal some highly classified material from a caravan of merchants. Un-fortunately, the caravan was highly guarded, but it was nothing the two put together couldn't handele. The simple mercs were put down by the skilled shinobi with ease. The merchants were never killed by Karin and Shiro. They took their keep, and brought it back to the village easily.

Apparently, the merchants however, were killed, although not by Karin an Shiro. This was still an unknown factor to all at the moment. The keep was given in and their money earned. Tenshu, was given to a neighbor of theirs, a good one, one they trusted alot the next morning, because they had another mission to run off and do. They never made it to the ron-de-vu point. Two days later they were found killed by taki ANBU, well, not killed by the ANBU, but killed in general. Upon further investigation, The kage found out they were intercepted by Cloud shinobi. They had murdered them, which was a surprise because of how skilled they were in their craft. No one knew how they were found, or how anyone knew it was them, or why they were killed, and what did Cloud have to do with this? No one seemed to know, everyone pointed fingers at each other, it was a huge mess.

Apparently, the merchants were cloud shinobi citizens, and cloud retaliated on the attackers. However, as mentioned earlier, Karin and Shiro never touched the merchants. it was a set up. Someone from taki followed them and killed the merchants, knowing Cloud would retaliate in some way, and gave the next mission information to cloud as a traitor to ensure their death the next day. A horrible story indeed, but the culprit was never found, to this day. Tenshu always finds the story hard to believe, and is always asking who would have wanted to do something to them? The village of taki concluded that they couldn't put a finger on someone, could have been anyone, they were theirs after all, and did steal from alot of people. Tenshu chooses not to really let it bother him all that much, he knows it won't bring them back, but on the same note he wishes he had them as a child. Instead he was stuck with the neighbors, and he greatly dislikes them. After the incident, the neighbor's Tenshu was left with, bonney, left taki. They figured it wasn't safe for Tenshu anymore, or them having ties to Shiro and Karin.

They made way for Takikagure, the Land of Waterfall. Not that it bothered Tenshu, it was just really wet alot. He was always interested in his past growing up, and his parents, who they knew, how they were, what skills did they possess, etc. Upon further investigation of this, he discovered that his mother Karin, was a part of the Kaishin Clan, a Ice clan. Tenshu was intrigued. He did alot of research on the clan about what they did, how they did it, etc. Eventually, he decided he were to par take in this ninjutsu, and called upon a clan member he had known within Takikagure at the time, to teach him. Luckily, he had explained his already history within the clan and his blood traits affixed to it, and such the clan members agreed. The training was tedious, and without having been put through the academy fully yet, doing any type of ninjutsu was difficult. Tenshu managed, and keep at it, like a good student.He didn't let failure get in his way of going forward and eventually getting it down. It wouldn't be long after that, that he did infact graduate from the academy, but barely. The training within the clan has keep him in tip top shape and helped him learn how to properly mold chakra and the like.

Upon being awarded the title of Genin, Tenshu was immediately put into a small team of a few other Genin. While training his clan jutsu, Tenshu also wanted to to expand his knowledge into something else. He thought long and hard all week, but came up with nothing. He already knew he had a natural affinity to Water and Ice through his kekkei genkei, but he wanted something else to make him even more useful, and something to fall back on. When training with his team, Tenshu hurt his ankle. Tenshu was always hurting himself like an idiot. He didn't care though, nothing comes without sacrifice, and he knew that best. In the hospital, he saw the doctors use awesome medical ninjutsu on him, and he vowed from that day forward, he would train into the medic arts of ninjutsu. Not being able to communicate, he had to do something useful. This was his ace in the hole. Tenshu met up with some cool doctors who we pretty cool with Tenshu about it, considering he was a mute and all. He trained under the doctor slightly, although hasn't gone into any techniques just yet. Because of his fascination with skulls while studying under the doctor, he started to call him the "skull kid". Tenshu loved it, and still like people to call him it to this day.

The Mask that he wears was something that came with time. The scars from his horrible ditzyness and training, as well as fights he would get into at bars and on missions and the like, caused his face to overtime, get brutally scarred. He started to look horrible and so he looked for something to cover himself with, to make it more bearable, and since he was a mute, he could never explain why his face looked the way it did.People got scarred of him and wouldn't talk to him cause of his brutal (I don't care about my body) training. That didn't stop him from crafting a wooden mask that was an odd shape. The shape translated into his random personality, and was a perfect fit from the moment he made it.

Tenshu's go get it, easy going, self closed personality effects the way he handles certain situations, but he manages. He is in full investigation of what had happened to his parents, and what special traits his father may have possessed as well. He will find the culprit and bring him down some day, but for now? He focuses on the shinobi life, missions, training for the Chuunin exams and the like, it is his job, you know, as is being a medic, which he is also working on still. Unfortunately it is incredibly hard to communicate as a Mute, but the "skull kid" always finds a way to make it happen.[/spoiler]

What, if anything, is wrong with this Bio?

[--Kosuke]

Starting off with the specialist, Tenshu claims to be a Medical|Tai and a Gen|Clan. This however isn't possible since he is required to have the Fuuton, Suiton, and Hyouton Release in order to be a Kaishin. If he wanted to master Ice Release for example, He could use a grandmaster for it. In Misc every things good except Herbalism is given to medics for free so it shouldn't take up a slot for him.

Now moving on to his fighting styles, DXS requires him to know and master one non-chakra related fighting style or since he is a medic to master medic. With that being said, WOK is a chakra related fighting style and would not count PLUS assuming this is not a re-create, He'd need to master a fighting stlye that doesn't use chakra like Muay Thai or Kempo for example. Also DXS takes up a craftsman slot.

Secondaries are good as he started with the smallest size and for Primary he'd need to post the overview which would be this.

SPOILER: Click to show

Great Sword (Overview)
Rank: "C"
Type: Main
Effect: Swords that slash hack, dice and anything else within this genre that reaches a certain length.
Special: ---
Drawback: ---
Description: Any bladed weapon that is longer then four feet, to even a whopping six and a half feet in length. weapons range from any types of blades such as the the Nodachi, the Great Sword, the Odachi, the Zanpacto. Any of these weapons or any weapon that fits within the length is considered as a long sword.
Limit: These types of weapons may be capable of being bought inside any Weapon Shop
Cost: 8,000 Ryo

Personality is fine though I would ask for him to at least space it out a bit.

Appearance is Fine

Justu's are good as he reaches the required and max amount for BL characters.

Now the history has Grammar Errors and a few others. To point them out now

Tenshu was born within the land of taki no kuni, the land of grass.

That doesn't make sense as it states that he was born in Mizu No Kuni, Not Taki No Kuni or Kusa No Kuni. Taki is the land of waterfall while Kusa is the Land of Grass. So he'd need to change it to either being born in Taki, Kusa, or Mizu within the Birth Country Area. So if he says he was born in Mizu as stated above then the sentence should read, 'Tenshu was born within Mizu no Kuni, The Land of Water.

Not many people knew what exactly had happened to his parents, and still to this day, the ones that did are mosly all dead.

Mosly-Mostly, Dead-Died. and I think the sentence should be 'Not many people knew what exactly happened to his parents, and still to this day.' 'The ones that did are mostly dead.'

All Tenshu knows, is he grew up an orphan.

Remove the ,

It wasn't until he was about 9 or 10 that his step family had revealed to him what had happened.

This sentence sounds contradicting to the "Not everyone knows what happened, The ones that do are mostly dead." So that would mean that the step family were the ones that are alive and knew what happened?

Tenshu's parents, growing up and living within taki were renown thiefs and hired to do alot of small arms robberies.

The "Taki" part may need to be changed depending on if Tenshi was born in Mizu or Kusa. Also "Small arms?" That would sort of constitute as fire arms which we dont have since this is Naruto.

Un-fortunately, the caravan was highly guarded, but it was nothing the two put together couldn't handele.

Un-Fortunately-Unfortunately Handele-handle

Apparently, the merchants however, were killed, although not by Karin an Shiro.

an-And

Two days later they were found killed by taki ANBU, well, not killed by the ANBU, but killed in general.

Again "Taki" is questionable

Apparently, the merchants were cloud shinobi citizens, and cloud retaliated on the attackers.

This sentence needs re-wording. 'Apparently, the merchants were Cloud Country citizens. Could Shinobi retaliated on the attackers.'

Someone from taki followed them and killed the merchants, knowing Cloud would retaliate in some way, and gave the next mission information to cloud as a traitor to ensure their death the next day.

"Taki still questionable and it should be 'knowing the cloud would retaliate in some way.' 'They gave mission information to the cloud as a traitor to ensure their deaths then next day.'

Tenshu always finds the story hard to believe, and is always asking who would have wanted to do something to them? The village of taki concluded that they couldn't put a finger on someone, could have been anyone, they were theirs after all, and did steal from alot of people.

So basically he KNEW how they died when no-else not even the village knew how it happened? Or was he told what everyone else was told that is IF they were told. "Taki" Still questionable. the comma after after all shouldn't be there and there should be a they after the and. 'they were theirs after all and they did steal from alot of people.'

They made way for Takikagure, the Land of Waterfall.

It was stated that he left "Taki" to go to Taki? That makes no sense and if he was born in Mizu then he left Mizu, If he left Kusa then he left Kusa.

At one part is says Kekkei Genkei, Kekkei Genkai?

He trained under the doctor slightly, although hasn't gone into any techniques just yet.

although "he" hasn't.

People got scarred of him

Scarred|Scared

[Koori.]

Medical Specialist

* Able to go into 6 Medical Forms, May Master 4 Medical Forms. (Medical, Herbalist, Animalist, Dian Xue Shu, Sensory)
* As a Medical Specialist, user goes into the 6 Medical Forms without sacrificing the needed requirements like Clans, or Fighting Styles. However use may not sacrifice Requirements in order to fully master everything. In order to Master more user must sacrifice Grand Master.
* May use 250 Training Points into Universal NinJutsu.
* May not be a NinJutsu Specialist while being a Medical Specialist.

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We don't get picky over the overviews around here. Additionally, The Fighting styles can be listed if they are going to be learned in the future. Medics cannot be Nin specialists, so your argument is nul. Medics get three releases last I checked, which is fine here, and he doesn't have to master them.


This was a trick question, there was nothing wrong with the bio, this is a perfectly fine and accepted bio of one o my alternative characters. The Grammar errors that you found were my fault however, I do all of the Assisstant application tests, and I must have mixed up some of the histories together when I copied this over in Wordpad, so that much you can slide on.

The things you pointed out were mostly grammar errors, which could be easily fixed with spell check and I am sorry I missed those myself.

You didn't realize that this was a trick question, and went fishing for things that were wrong. I am sorry, but you failed.[/blockquote][/font]

[Uchiha Satoshi]

Official 1/2 denial