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[Kou]

hey, thanks for the comment akido.
i lost most of my lyrics when i moved, but recently i found some.


and to tell the truth most of these songs deal with stuff that has really happened in my life. like the one im gonna show you.

anyways, just read it and honestly tell me what you think.

well, here goes....

she would always tell me to,
grow up
meanwhile im waiting for her maturity to,
show up,
we would go our separate ways in the end,
but once upon a time we were friends,
we had been friends for a while,
but now our feelings had become hostile,
in 7th grade she was all happy and warm,
but in 8th grade a new person began to form,
she really liked this guy,
but he never acknowledged her and she didnt know why,
inside it made her want to cry,
so she kissed her happiness goodbye,
meanwhile, i would just sit back and sigh,
and how else did she react?
she turned around and started wearing black,
yup, thats right emo she went,
and at first i didnt know what it meant,
but if i dared bring up up she would get pissed,
then go home and cut her wrist,
but the old friend is what i missed,
damn, our friendship is gonna,
blow up,
and she would always tell me to,
grow up,
meanwhile im waiting for her maturity to,
show up,
but when your friend is now an enemy there is,
no up.


yeah, i never did really finish it. ill probably try to sometime.

[Ryu]

I think its pretty good.

[Kou]

((if you've already read these lyrics, dont pay any attention to them. i just wanted to copy and paste them to this thread since its active. plus, im deleting my other thread.))

no reason for it really, i simply write my own lyrics when there's nothing to do. not that i wanna be a music artist or anything.

if it sux, then so be it.


verse 1.

nobody likes a poser,
but welcome to a school where nobody knows you,
or even tries to show you,
instead they blow you,
off,
they dont even listen,
they'd rather fool around and keep dissin,
meanwhile, they're pissin,
me off,
they dont even care,
dont turn your back on me,
dont you dare,
even as i stop here and stare,
this pain and loneliness is too much to bare,
might as well take up the emo lifestyle,
stick around with it for a while,
make things clear,
maybe for a year,
not even,
ill never change as long as im still breathin,
but hey,
who gives a f**k what ive got to say?
especially when today is a new day,
not her,
not him,
not them,
but me,
yes me,
i just wanna try to be somebody,
for once id like to win,
despite the fact that the ice im skating on is thin,
when i make it let the hating begin,
while i just sit back and grin,
at the school where nobody knows you,
and nobody like a poser....

It's a hard life when you grow up as the middle man,
The outsider tryin' to find the middle-ground
You fight back, go for yours and try to take a stand
But when your mouth opens deaf ears don't hear a sound


verse 2

round 2,
and here we go again,
too many thoughts,
my heads starting to spin,
everything seems to be blurred,
and all my dreams have become deffered,
but its ok,
its been like this for a while,
been gave up the emo lifestyle,
never walk in my own shoes again,
even for a while,
even still this environment is hostile,
even still things are getting worse,
even still it seems as if im under a curse,
even still my sanity is about to burst,
its like an unquenchable thirst,
cause im always second,
and they're always first,
at the school were nothing good is taught,
and everything seems to be my fault,
im going nowhere,
ill never win,
damn this school is full of sin,
and corruption,
its eating me away like a constant interruption,
now sit back,
and watch it all erode,
while in the past hope still glowed,
but its time to pay it back what it owed,
but ill never turn down that road,
instead i fell as if i could internally explode,
implode,
unload,
reload,
upon me atonement has been bestowed,
so ill never let you hurt my pride,
even though there's nowhere to hide,
i guess im just along for the ride,
at the school where nobody knows you,
cause nobody likes a poser....

It's a hard life when you grow up as the middle man,
The outsider tryin' to find the middle-ground
You fight back, go for yours and try to take a stand
But when your mouth opens deaf ears don't hear a sound



verse 3

look at all the loss and pain,
looks like its time for a new reign,
look at all the pain and loss,
look at what our freedom has cost,
we used to dream of a world with no,
flaws,
but now we're overrun by a world full of,
laws,
my love for hate will never age,
no one else will ever understand my rage,
why do you think i wrote this song?
of course, to right has been done wrong,
now be quiet and just listen,
dont you hear hope as it glistens?
if you're too busy hatin you're just missin,
out,
on what its all about,
now raise your heads, scream, and shout,
at the school where nobody knows you,
cause nobody likes a poser....

It's a hard life when you grow up as the middle man,
The outsider tryin' to find the middle-ground
You fight back, go for yours and try to take a stand
But when your mouth opens deaf ears don't hear a sound....

[end]

-// heihachi

[C-C-C-Cryptekz]

You need a hook bro, and your set.

Also, props for saying what I haven't been able to put into words for the past Eleven years.
Much respect. I can't help but think about how much that hits me on a personal level.

[akidokidiyoma]

Yo man, sick stuff Heihachi. Like I said, you got the talent my dude. I wanna spit something to that verse you posted, see if you like it.

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This time it was really over, it's really the end
I couldn't imagine or fathom, losin my best friend
Especially over, some dude that was like him
He couldn't see the beauty, that was inside, damn

I knew she was sick, but I didn't know shit
I knew he was a trick, but I didn't know she'd slip
Now when she see's me, she bites down on her lip
I think about what I should do, it's time for me to dip

I'm losin my mind, I gotta get home
I think I'm a do it this time, this time it's on
I know she lonely, she says she's so alone
All I hear is silence, even when we talk on the phone

There's a party tonight, I know I'm going to go
No I wasn't invited, but tonight my true colors show
Walk in and find him, soon as they open up the doe
Pop the clip in, cock it back, she'll cry over him no mo

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Be sure to let me know what you think, just a simple add on to what you wrote.

[--Arata]

Drop this to Champion

Check the swag, it's nasty like a ol lil dirty hag
Keep money in brown bags in da back of the cad
Switching suits, and new ties, looking like the new fad
Ready to launch hits clean from the writing pad
Calling on me to do what i do at the grad

Welcome to the pit where I bring nothing but heat
Philosophical lyricist that desires more beats
Letting it touch the souls of others and letting them meet
Dreams of the kids, that say they can never be
Give me a beat and watch them listen to me speak

Look at my style, my physique, da technique,
One could even go so far to say he's unique
The way his lyrics leak it's so mystique
But his pen would be cherished like a old antique
Born a champion, with a winning streak

Never will my opposition make my future bleak
I do rap every day of the week
Like a pimp with the powder technique
Instead of slaps I'm showing them a natural freak
No sex pun intended it's just plain ol me
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Will drop my Put On verse real soon. You think Atsu killed it. Wait till I bring that heat.

[akidokidiyoma]

Seika I know you just trying to help me out, but I've already told you before, even if it's not exact, you still basically jacked someone else's stuff. Please revise your post or I'll be forced to link these people to the track, "Alphabetical Slaughter" by Papoose.

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I want to show you people the lyrics of a true genius, the guy who got me started on going Alphabetical. These are the lyrics to Papoose's "Alphabetical Slaughter". So take notes and learn:

[Papoose]
(A!) Alert, assassins at large allegedly
Automatic artillery, angrily aimed and aggressively
Accurate AK's angled all ways
Adversary afraid as active ammunition abraise
Accumulated an alias after arrested
Accompanied armed accessory, as an adolescent
(B!) Bridge Benz brolic burner bringing brothers
Betrayer's bodies briefly be body banged bleeding brothers
Blades blasting brave bashing Brooklyn bullet busters
Big biscuits barrels blazing be hating bitch boasts and bluffers
Borough barricaders beat bringers brutally blast
Bringin blood baths (C!) cover cowards corners collecting cash
Confirmed convicts committing crimes clapping cats
Creeping cashiers causing characters comas, capping crabs
Chaos causing, clearly commanding Cee-Lo
Cocaine capsule caps colored, capturing customer's C-Notes
Confiscating combination, counting cream capulating
Cocking calibur chromes creating casualties compensating
(D!) Domination devoted dealer devastating
Determination demonstrating, devine dedication
Debating drug deals, demanding dough distributed
Definitely dividing double-digit dollar dividends
Drama declaring demolishing domain dozer
Directing dumb-dumbs doing dummies dirty disarming Dojos
(E!) Estimating earnings enlarged and economically
Equally educating each exercising equality
Eliminating, expiring enemies eradicating
Erasing evidence every element evacuating
(F!) Fake fraud faggots fronting for fame fleeing from flames
Firing full-fledged four-fours forcing flesh from frames
Fortune fanatic, follow formats for funds faithfully
Fuck five felonies, furiously fighting for freedom fatally
Frigidy, frantic fighting FEDS feeling fearful
Finacially fortunate, flipping figures from fifty-fifty
(G!) Gambles gathering grants, grabbing gauges, gangsta ganks geeks
Getting green, Guess garments gleaming, greatly gaining G's
Ghetto genius, genuine gestures gracefully guide
Government generals gradually generating genocide
(H!) Head hoodlum, hitting heads heavenly, hypnotizing
Hire hitmen harnessly, holding heaters, hospitalizing
High holding hammers hectically hitting herbs, homiciding
Helicopter hijacking holding hostages, horrifying
(I!) Intellectually infinite imperial idol infamous
Inhale the Izm, injecting intelligence in ignorance
(J!) Jungle jump juggler, jaw-jabbing jeopardizer
Jacking jewelry jingles, jackknife jigging jittery jivers
(K!) Konnivers, knowledge key, keep a king, keep a kingdom
KKK killing, keenly keeping kosher
(L!) Living legitimate, legal license, Lex' lasting longevity
Luxury life, language lacing lyrical legacy
Lighting L's, loudly lounging living large like Luther
Loading long Lugers lethally lullabying losers
(M!) Maneuvers, made miraculously, microphone majesty
Music messiah mastered money making mathematically
(N!) Naturally negative, Notorious, Naughty Nature
Nasty New York nigga narcotic negotiator
(O!) Observator, oppression obstructing originator
Organized official officer oxen operator
(P!) Plot participator, plan powder pushing premeditated
Po-Po partners patrolin preventing payment
Prosecuting penny pinchers, prison penalty permanent placement
Packing powerful pistols punk plea and player's playing pavement
(Q!) Quote – "Queen's qualifyed quantity quality"
(R!) Rulers rule righteously rightfully royal rapology
Real revolutionaries rather regulate rivalry
Rampantly raising raiders rampagin relentless rivalry
(S!) Semi-sub, snub slugs sniping sharp shooter
Smacking soldiers silly severely shanking stupid (T!) troopers
Terrorizing, terrible thorough thug terrifying
Toting two tecs, taking territories thoroughly thriving
(U!) Unifying ultimately uplifting uncivilized
Unique understanding universally utilized
(V!) Visualize vocab victoriously vocalized
Versatile vice-versa verbals viciously victimize
(W!) Wise willy witty wisdom waging wars wisely
(X!) X-Con (Y!) yapping y'all yearningly (Z!) zig-zag Z!

[DJ KaySlay]
Hold on hold on
My nigga Papoose just took y'all, through the whole alphabet
A to Z, now we bout to flip it backwards, Z to A
Yo Papoose, get at these niggaz man, let's go!

[Papoose]
(Z!) Zig-zag zigs involved weighing Zambian Zaires
Zodiac zone and Zulu's, Zion's zap a zillion zillionaires
(Y!) Yo you yeah, yesterday's youth yearning your Ryo
You yellow-bellied Yankee ying-yang yelling "yes"-men
(X!) X-rated, ex-African, X-Man
Ex-leaders, ex-Clarence, X-Malcolm, X-Clan
(W!) We want war, World War, world-wide warning
Walking with weapons we wacking walkie-talkie wearing wardens
We with whatever, want what whyling wherever war went
Warlock, warpath, warfare, warriors and Warren's – wait, what, why?

[Ryu]

But isnt it different?

[Kou]

sick.


akido that serious verse and i am being honest about that. i was really feeling 3 and 4, dude thats thats some powerful stuff, really. i like how you ended the story.

but anyways, if you ever want me to do a verse in this thread just pm me me dude. im not too good with the gangsta rap and battling, but ill see what i can do. thanks a lot man.

oh, and thanks for the comment seikei, you got a chorus in mind?

[rorschach]

This is purely hypothetical rhetoric,
Designed to stick in your mind and kick around,
Your thoughts so sound stagnance doesn't stand a chance,
Against this story of deadly romance that I spun,
I wonder if you'll understand my meaning in this fleeting tale,
A failed life of male pride and stale sights,
Set on the first girl I saw that night,
That's right it's lust not love that I write,
So it started real slow and steady,
Ready to take a chance on heavy change,
To rearange my first actions to last stands,
Against an enemy in the fast land,
She was beautiful there is no doubt about this,
But trust was not to exist in our relationship,
even though she was the girl I'd wished for,
Dreamed about all my life on that night,
It felt so right,
She looked at me with eyes full of sweet surprise,
My mind fired thoughts of tired lines to capture this beast they call beauty,
But if you'd seen what I saw so raw you'd fall quickly down,
And feel the pounding that I felt melt my belt,
I tell you this to reminisce the chance I wish I missed,
But the experience was wonderful under those stars our hearts,
Our bodies our minds intertwined in a dance that belongs to time,
Her lips were full and worked their pull till I was full in her,
Yet to stir this occured in an instant of time,
But before we'd ever spoke I knew she was mine,
So fine so hard to define that crime that was her glow,
So slow everything around her felt fast,
Like every moment was already past,
Like every thought wouldn't last,
Then we moved together like a magnetic pull,
And I let it,
Didn't fight the world,
I heard the call and answered tall just to fall to my knees and plead,
She'd known this was comin and hummed sweet loving,
Running me in circles,
She had finesse in aranging this mess to my distress,
But I saw her pull the strings,
I knew everything,
And I let her win,
She won me easily with no fight,
Because that night I was in need,
And I was drawn to her like a bird to feed,
The seed she'd lain I readily scooped up,
And let it grow in me without trimming these feelings,
Until they burst and I was worse than a scarred husk,
A man consumed by lust,
She trusted I'd do just that,
And so I did,
Because the prize for my pride was worth losing in her eyes.

[akidokidiyoma]

Sept 20, 2008 19:04:02 GMT -7 Kou said:

sick.


akido that serious verse and i am being honest about that. i was really feeling 3 and 4, dude thats thats some powerful stuff, really. i like how you ended the story.

but anyways, if you ever want me to do a verse in this thread just pm me me dude. im not too good with the gangsta rap and battling, but ill see what i can do. thanks a lot man.

oh, and thanks for the comment seikei, you got a chorus in mind?

It is what it is my dude. I'm a pm you real quick so we can get somethin poppin.

[C-C-C-Cryptekz]

It's a hard life when you grow up as the middle man,
The outsider tryin' to find the middle-ground
You fight back, go for yours and try to take a stand
But when your mouth opens deaf ears don't hear a sound



You spend your time chasin' after your dreams
Waste the days away for a future in colledge
Weaving fancies and treacherous schemes
All in a bid just to try to get acknowledged



Take your pick, one, the other, or both together man.

I tried to think of something that would work with the flow, and match the style.

Hope these help ^^

[akidokidiyoma]

I like the first choice for the hook. Make it times 2 and it's perfect.

[C-C-C-Cryptekz]

That's what I was thinkin' too... the first flows so much better then the second IMO.

It's up to him though.

[Tenkai]

Lol yall crazy.

[Kou]

yeah, ill go with the first chorus.

awesome, thanks a lot dude.
you wanna try to come up with a third verse to my other song?
yo, akido, you putting him on the track? hes pretty good.

[Ryu]

www.youtube.com/watch?v=fCZK9qspkQM

My life ya tryin to stay alive
make a couple of millions get me out of this place
ya feel me. here I go
[0:25]
my life so bold
livin a risky life
sometimes got me feeling like "wheres the knife"
use to do that crazy shit and slit my wrists
everytime I got pissed
now a days I just play a beat sit back and diss
I was a little thug until I moved to the 804
got introduced to the game blew up
now im on the corner sellin drugs like a screw up
but its my life and im tryin to make that cash
late at night black benz rollin up real slow lights turned off
a couple of blasts sound and im booking it tryin not to get blasted
wanting to see a new day look at my babies face and smile
now im livin misery im walkin image of pain.
I refain alone in the dark thinkin of the better part of my life
no gangs no thugs no game to run me crazy
now im forgettin my own name
cant say it aint tryin to get locked up or blown away
but this is my life
so stay the fuck away i aint need help
pray to god but still gotta carry a gat to make sure im safe if a nigga wants to attack
im droppin the mic and strikin back

use to be a huge family boy run around and play with my toys
now the only toy i got is metal and can get really hot
I smoke a rock and get rid of my stress
but I cant picutre what it would be like
if I left the street behind 'cant even say that
cause I would never do that casue this shit is mine.

[Ryu]

(hero beat)

Ya baby im the hero of the 804
let me put yall on my back and carry you
Cause i'll carry yall to the top.
Ya dig!

listen to em shoutin out my name
sayin i was the nigga who brought rap to shame
but I cant help it that im sickly insane
better clear my way or i'll give you the flu
you can try to diss me but when im done their gonna be like "who are you"
im mentally true and ill do anything to be a hero
im so big and bad that my money holds a lot of zero's
now dont feel bad if you aint doin it big
dont be mad cause im at the top of the game
if you say im lame ill light you up like flame
they tried to say I never was hot
but im hotter then metal above a fire pot
spit a rhyme over a beat and watch it sizzle
I got the dizzle mo fizzle and I can make it drizzle
Psike I can make it pour
pour all over your girl cause my umbrialla cant even keep her dry
better watch out my money will easily drown her and make her die

They say they lookin for a hero
so im here and walkin out the front door like lets go!
they need some one to believe in
believe in me ill make the city grow
grow in fame cause thats my aim
makein Va when of sickest states
so all yall haters shut seal ur mouth cause you cant even hate no more
i know no hating? man what a bore
but Va takin all these others states to war
put up your guts and glory
we will stomp on em cause we dont give an F about your story
step up to the hero and we will send you back to history
make sure your defeate wasnt a mystery
they sayin the hatin on me cause of my rhymes
but you can tell they hatin out of fear
but dont switch this to a diss
cause if you wanna hear me diss ill simply say all yall can kiss my fist
im jumpin to the streets cause their's money to be made.
so shut the fuck up and pay me

[Ryu]

www.youtube.com/watch?v=1UehhxB8xSE

This is my big brother
aint it super?
everyone lovin him cause he is a trooper
everyone puttin me down
he would tell me not to worry I aint a blooper
He is my superstar
we are more then family but friends
tiein up each others loose ends
man I cant even pretend to hate him
that wouldn't be right
if I was to throw down he will be next to me willing to fight
brought a good name to us
thus the stress didnt press
I guess he is the family bless
yes, I musst confess he really he is
now he grew up and moved out
rmessed up my hair as he looked me in the eye
I almost wanted to cry as he was going to war and he could die
before he left he told me a something
a thing I could never forget.
he said. "Look lil homie we been through a lot of a shit, if you pissed just spit your fire remember now its your time to shine like that twinkle in the sky."

Now he survived and was my idle
but I couldnt tell him that casue what we had turned into a rival
my insperation, gettin in front of him was my destanation
now have you ever walked in the steps of a giant
always casting a shadow on you.
When you looked down lookin for your own shadow
man it was always hard to find it.
but I dont mind it i like the challange
he is the reason I stepped up my game
if it wasnt for him I probably wouldnt be the same
i owe the world to him
allowin me to reach the stars
and he had his arm stretched out
tryin to pull me up to mars
man it was so far
but I guess I gotta keep tryin
keep fryin these beats with my fire
pretty soon ill be next to him.

[rorschach]

Okay,
Imma cook summthin up right about now,
Ya heard,

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I start mah shit on the skillet,
I kill it when I fill it with butter,
So supple a couple of slices make it so nice,
and slippery to dip quick crack the shells and drip drip,
Then it starts to sizzle and pop,
But I don't stop,
Just chop that shit up,
And flop it over once or twice,
Smells so nice,
Boil some rice,
Add some spice,
And then when it's done,
I have a lotta fun,
Munchin my breakfast slash lunch,
And dinner time is rollin around pretty soon,
So I drops my spoon,
Finish my food,
Take some hits from the l my lungs I fill,
And turn on my george forman fat reducing grill,
Make a burger no two to chill,
And I don't kill the cow man,
My shit's frozen,
Bought it in a box all snug and cozy,
And these rosy cheeked motherfuckers wanna suck my cock,
Cuz I can cook without making a spill,
I was defiled as a child by culinary style,
Don't smile it's real bile,
I put in your shit,
Mine's legit,
Cheese burgers I just don't quit,
won't quit,
cuz it don't fit,
it's the only thing my stomache likes,
and I can handle it,
So before you go and try this at home,
Remember I'm better than you,
Quicker with a knife,
And I know my spices like I know my life,
I can put that shit on till it tastes just right,
Then you'll take a bite and be like damn this shit's tight.