Aburmae (Shina) Rika (Finished, basically)

[Shina Rika]

Name: Aburame (Shina) Rika
Age: 13
Height: 155cm
Weight: 45kg
Gender: Female
Alignment: True Neutral
Birth Country: Wind
Village: Stone
Special:

::+Water Release+::
::+Earth Release+::
::+Wind Release+::

::+Tai Spec.+::
::+Gen Spec.+::

(Minor)

Chakra Gate User
ANBU "Roots"


Genjutsu Releases
::+Phantasm Release+::
::+Figment Release+::

Secondary Weapons:

12 Shuriken (4 slots)
7 Kunai (7 slots)
4 Exploding Tags (1 slot)
6 Smoke Grenade (3 slots)

Primary Weapon:

Yakuin (Staff) weapon she uses in battle. (Seen in appearance)

Personality:

Quiet
She will barely speak. When she does, it will only be a whisper. If you want to make friends with her, do not expect her to be the first to speak.
Unpredictable
It is almost impossible to predict the future when around this girl. She may suddenly turn around and disobey your orders, or jump into a situation that would mean certain death.
True to her heart
It is hard to get her to listen to you, as she will basically only follow what her heart says. Perhaps this is sometimes a bad thing, but whatever happens, she seems to walk her own walk, not down the path of others.
Brave
Whatever the situation, the girl will not give in. Blood can pour from her body for all she cares. She will fight to the end. No matter whoever, or whatever her opponent is.
Prefers to finish it
When in battle, the girl will barely toy with her enemy. Once she knows the opponents strength and weakness, she will act on it and aim to kill. This, in some situations, makes her quick-to-act, and could crate failure. But this is the way she prefers to finish a battle quickly.

Appearance:

She has her Yakuin, which she usually carries. Sometimes you will find it attached the her back, with several small ties. She has short, light-brown hair. White long sleeved shirt worn. Wears dark black overall type things over her shirt, which includes a skirt attached to the bottom of it. Wears hair band with black, furry cat ears attached to it (Insides of ears pink and white).
(Forget the tail ^_^ ) Originally her hair color was green, but because of her parents, she now has brownish-red eyes. Has an angelic-white skin tone that seems to shine in the sunlight.

Bloodlimit: None (Is in Aburame Clan)
NinJutsu Techniques:

Below

GenJutsu Techniques:

Below

TaiJutsu Techniques:

Below

History:

::+Her History was not the worst+::
But it was close.

+2 Years old+
Such a violent history. When she cried, she was beaten until she stopped. When she asked for things, they would be refused. She almost always got the opposite of what she wanted. Because of this, she would sometimes run away from her own house and cry. Cried till rivers poured from her eyes. Her heart was empty.

+4 Years old+
She was trained to kill. Even at such a young age, she was taught by her parents to destroy. After this training she was known as a curse to the Wind Country. This filled her empty heart with hatred, which her parents had intended of course. Originally, her eye color was green, but shortly after..

+6 Years old+
Her parents would teach her the art of silent killing. She was all too evil for her own good by now. Her parents hated her, and simply used her as a tool against the Wind Country. She had killed many innocent people wandering the Country. Her hate was so great, her eye color turned to red, representing the anger inside her.

+8 Years old+
She killed her parents. She could not stand them. Perhaps that left some of the hate inside her changed heart, but it did not completely destroy it.

+10 Years old+
It was in this year she discovered her talent: The Aburame useage. It seems her parents had granted her something she could use to her advantage. She could not stand her violent killing against the wind; she joined the stone.

I suppose all's well that ends well...
But did it end well? Only time will tell...

[Shina Rika]

::+Clan Jutsus+::

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• Kikaichu no Jutsu (Destruction Bug Host Technique)
Rank: D
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: Allows the user to control the kikaichu given to him or her at birth.
Special: N/A
Drawback: The kikaichu feed from the shinobi’s chakra.
Description: This allows the user the control the kikaichu in the use for their techniques. he bugs feed and live off the Chakra which the body stores and in return the Ninja gets to control and command the bugs, using them as their primary fighting technique. These bugs have the ability to drain chakra through physical contact with the enemy (and possibly consume a fraction of the host's chakra as well.)
Limit: Aburame Clan only Needed for other Jutsus of this clan, if one does not start, then they must pay a hefty fine of 25,000 Ryo.

• Mushi Bunshin no Jutsu
Rank: C
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: Creates a clone made out of bugs.
Special: Rat, Dragon, Ram, Horse, Monkey, Dog
Drawback: Will dissipate after one solid hit.
Description: The user performs the handseals, creating a clone of bugs. This clone will dissipate after one solid hit. When the user first learns this jutsu, they are capable of only creating one Mushi Bunshin. However, with B ranked training, they may increase that number by one. This training may be performed a maximum of 9 times, allowing for a maximum ten bug clones.
Limit: Kikaichu no Jutsu

Tandokunonarabi Mushi Ryuuki (Single Line Bug Projection)
Rank: D
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: The user extends a solid line of kikai towards an opponent.
Special: Extension of the Aburame shinobi’s arm.
Drawback: Doesn’t move very fast, so it is easy to dodge.
Description: The user extends a single arm, sending out one solid wave of bugs that attempt to attack the enemy. It doesn’t move very fast nor can it turn with any real efficiency, meaning this attack has difficulty keeping up with anyone that is moving.
Limit: Kikaichu no Jutsu

[Shina Rika]

::+Genjutsu Jutsus+::

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Magen: Daichi Fusen (Demonic Illusion: Ground Slip)
Rank: "C" Rank
Skill: Genjutsu
Effect: Causes the opponent to believe that a part of their leg is caught within the ground.
Special: "Hand Seals"- Monkey, Ox, Horse, Rabbit, Reverse Dragon
Drawback: The effect is only illusionary, meaning that it does nothing to the opponent if they break the illusion.
Description: Gathering chakra via use of handseals, the shinobi releases this chakra to attack the opponent's brain. The brain, thus effected, will cause an illusion within the mind stimulating the senses of touch, sound, and sight. Within the opponent's vision, a small portion of the ground will gave way underneath either their right of left foot, causing them to lose their balance slightly. They will then find that the ground is seemingly closed again, except now their foot is caught within the ground. Unless dispelled, they become unable to move away from that spot.
Limit: Must know Phantasm Perception

[Shina Rika]

::+Doton No Jutsus+::

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1. Stone Nin Only Jutsus

Name: Tsuchi Hijutsu – Nendoken (Earth Secret Technique – Clay Blade)
Rank: D
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: The user tosses a handful of soil at the foe, which then moves at him at high speed.
Special: Tiger, Dragon, Snake
Drawback: The clay doesn’t do much damage unless it strikes an eye.
Description: The user forms the hand seals, then tosses a bit of soil or clay into the air. The resultant cloud of earthen particles moves towards the opponent at high speed, inflicting minor cuts and potentially blinding if it gets in the eye.
Limit: Earth Release, Stone Village Only

2. Normal Doton Jutsus[/i]

Name: Doton: Deido Bunshin no Jutsu (Earth Release: Mud Clone Technique)
Rank: C
Skill: Ninjutsu. Defensive, and Offensive.
Effect: Allows the user to create clones out of Mud.
Special: Dog, Rat, Boar, Ox.
Drawback: Needs a source of mud that can supply enough mud to make the desired amount of clones. Ex: If there is only enough mud to make four clones, you can't make eight. Only four.
Description: Using mud in the area, the user can create mud clones depending on his/her ninja rank/class. Because the clones are made of mud, they are more durable than most other clones. May take two hits to destroy instead of one. The personality of the clones depend on the users personality. The user can channel thoughts with the clones. The weight of the clones and amount of mud needed depends on the user's body weight. Finally, the user can control what the clones say, and control the clones actions.
D Ranked Ninjas: Up to 4 Clones at a time.
C Ranked Ninjas: Up to 8 Clones at a time.
B Ranked Ninjas: Up to 16 Clones at a time.
A Ranked Ninjas: Up to 32 Clones at a time.
S Ranked Ninjas: Up to 64 Clones at a time.
Limit: Must know Earth Release.

[Shina Rika]

::+Taijutsus+::

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1. Goken

Gouken no Kamae (Iron fist stance)
Rank: E
Skill: Taijutsu
Effect: Once in this stance one’s speed and strength increases due to positioning of muscles and limbs.
Special: None
Drawback: None
Description: Not exactly a technique, but a fighting style. It packs tons of speed and power and relies on the user's physical strength and fitness. It is also the prime holder of the majority of Konoha's elite taijutsu techniques. Standing with one arm behind their back and one extended, the user is ready for a quick strick with their fists and feet. This leaves them open for quick spins and jumps that will power their attacks.
Limit: none

Konokha Senpu (Konoha Hurricane)
Rank: D
Skill: Taijutsu
Effect: Spinning quickly at an upward angle, the user kicks their opponent in the jaw sending them HIGH into the air and open for another attack.
Special: None
Drawback: Leaves the user open if they miss
Description: With a powerful spin kick at the opponent’s jaw, the user sends their opponent high into the air. This is a more effective way of sending opponents flying than Dynamic Entry.
Limit: Must know Gouken no Kamae

Kage Konoha Buyo (Shadow of the Dancing Leaf)
Rank: C
Skill: Taijutsu
Effect: The User jumps in a way that makes the opponent think they are below them, when in fact they appear in the air beside them. Set up for other attacks.
Special: None
Drawback: While in air the user is vulnerable to attacks.
Description: Jumping into the air in a manner that surprises the opponent, making them think you are still on the ground, you appear beside them and are open now to using many more of Goken’s powerful attacks.
Limit: Opponent must be in the air(Dynamic Entry, Konoha Senpu allow this), must know Gouken no Kamae

2. The Chakra Gates[/color]

[Shina Rika]

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[shigetsu]

Well,

1.) Your "gender" says male, yet in every other section of your profile you refer to your character as a she; you might want to fix that, love.

2.) You'll need a lot more in your appearance and personality - elaborate on what you've listed so far, writing it out in paragraph form.

3.) Your history set up is good, but once again I'm going to ask you to elaborate further on what you've already given. Add more details and beef it up some, and I'll definitely slap an approval on this profile.

4.) You have two more techniques you can have in your profile, e-c rank.

[pandoru]

shigetsu said:

Well,

4.) You have two more techniques you can have in your profile, e-c rank.

Nope, she took perceptions *points to the top of the profile* Her three freebies are releases, thus the perceptions count as techniques.

Please do everything else he's asked of you though .-.

[Sayuri "Cupcake"]

Just to eleborate a little more,

2-3 more sentances in personality at minimum.

4-6 more sentances in appearence at minimum.

[Shina Rika]

Sayuri, I am editing it slowly ^_^. My computer is freezing terribly (Almost every 5 minutes) so I am editing small parts so to save all progress.

EDIT: OMG IT IS SO HARD TO SAY ANYTHING MORE IN APPEARANCE. Y-Y Damn it...

[Shina Rika]

Howabout now? ^_^

[shigetsu]

She has her Yakuin, which she usually carries. Sometimes you will find it attached the her back, with several ties.
She has short, brown hair.
White long sleeved shirt worn.
Wears dark black dress overall type things over her shirt.
Wears hair band with black cat ears attached to it (Insides of ears pink and white).
(Forget the tail ^_^ )
Originally her hair color was green, but because of her parents, she now has brownish-red eyes.
Has an angelic-white skin tone.

Eh, that's still not going to cut it, darlin'.

Instead of putting your text in a "list" like format, why not use a paragraph? If you're having a hard time coming up with things to talk about, why not just elaborate further on what you've already put?

For example, describe exactly how short her hair is; are the kitten ears fuzzy or soft? Also, you might want to use complete sentences - not only do they add words, but they make your writing easier to read.

[Shina Rika]

I suppose so...

Ill get onto it. Its just not my picture, so its hard to describe things about it.

Done, now is it alright?

(Im never using another picture like this again >.< )

[shigetsu]

She has her Yakuin, which she usually carries. Sometimes you will find it attached the her back, with several small ties.
She has short, light-brown hair.
White long sleeved shirt worn.
Wears dark black overall type things over her shirt, which includes a skirt attached to the bottom of it.
Wears hair band with black, furry cat ears attached to it (Insides of ears pink and white).
(Forget the tail ^_^ )
Originally her hair color was green, but because of her parents, she now has brownish-red eyes.
Has an angelic-white skin tone that seems to shine in the sunlight.

You're working on it, but still I suggest some changes. For example, look at how I modified what you've posted - this looks much nicer, and has a little more detail.

Example: She has her Yakuin, which she usually carries. Sometimes you will find it attached the her back, with several small ties. She has short, light-brown hair.She wears a white long sleeved shirt. She wears dark black overall type things over her shirt, which includes a skirt attached to the bottom of it. She wears her hair band with black, furry cat ears attached to it (Insides of ears pink and white). Originally her hair color was green, but because of her parents, she now has brownish-red eyes. She has an angelic-white skin tone that seems to shine in the sunlight.

___

Now, try revising your own version (that does not mean copy and paste mine), and I'll be willing to approve your profile.

[Shina Rika]

Oh boy, now is it okay?