Mist Waterfall (Training)

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Suiton - Teppodama
Rank: "C" Rank
Skill: NinJutsu
Effect: Allows a user to shoot a ball of water out of their mouth.
Special: "Handseals"
Drawback: ---
Description: The Teppodama is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Water Element. The ninja does some hand seals which then causes a big ball of water to come from the users mouth and then hit their target.
Limit: Water Release

Zagari made a journey to hidden mist marine waters where he could do some training but he said he would like to swim around and be one with water before he started. The water was cold when he entered it but it wasn’t too much of a problem for him, as he gawked around the water he put some water in his mouth not swallowing it but keeping it there as he shot it out of his mouth the distance wasn’t so far so knew he knew he had work to get on with as he came out of the lake he headed to a training ground where he started training.

He picked out a training dummy and did a few hand seals and did shark projectile technique, Zagari was just testing was water style out before he started training for the technique Teppodama. Then he looked at the training dummy immediately and saw that most of his body parts where decapitated a grin appeared on Zagar’s mouth as he picked an shuriken and a new training dummy at the whole of the shuriken in the middle he put water inside and then thought he could control but it didn’t work. Zagari said to himself maybe I need water mastery for that as the grin disappeared

Zagari travelled all the way to mount Hiroshima in the hidden cloud village to start contemplating as he got to the hidden cloud he went to meet a friend and ask him if he knows any place called mount Hiroshima as he asked his friend he said in fact yes I do it’s in the hidden cloud lightning city next to there you will see 30foot mountain but there is only one problem it is going to be hard to get up there so you better start your journey.

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Zagari headed to lightning city he made a stop there at the ramen shop to go eat some ramen until he looked at his wallet and it was empty, then he now saw an old lady crying he went over to her and asked her what happened why is she crying she said that a thief saw her purse then zagari said he will help her get her purse zagari saw the masked thief running away then he started his chase with him.


Zagari eventually blocked his path with mist then jumped over to him punched him in his face grabbed the purse then he let the thief go after the punch as he returned back to the lady then she was so happy he gave him 2,500ryo and a free ramen coupon card he was happy as he went back to the ramen shop, he ordered large size of ramen with egg and fish he sat down and started eating then it just came to his head I’m supposed to be climbing mount Hiroshima.

When zagari finished his bowl of ramen he immediately rushed and left the small store going all the way to the mountain where he was supposed to start climbing then he just realized he needs to digest his food and use the toilet he went to a lounge to lie down for 30min it costed him 500ryo when he finished resting and using the toilet he got up and started hiking to mount Hiroshima.

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When he finally got to the mountain he started climbing sticking his kunai from one edge to another then he just thought about it I don’t need to climb he just channeled chakra into his feet and started scaling through the edges he picked up his kunai and put them both inside his ninja pouch where all his stuff is. Then he continued walking up the mountain just minding his own business.


He got to tired eventually then his chakra in his legs just clogged as he fell down he quickly brought out his two kunai’s the stuck it to the surface of the mountain he said to himself that was a close one wiping thee sweat of his head all coming from him showing his quick reactions to get his kunai.s then he kept on going on the he finally got there as he rested for 10minutes.


When he got there he immediately jumped into the hot springs and started swimming joyfully then he did a few hand signs and a big water bubble appeared in his mouth as he shot it out it was pacey and had some distant but it worked the teppodama technique was learned he gave it all he had and it worked he was happy, he eventually started sleeping at the highest part of the mountain after all Zagari went through to learn this technique it actually paid off.

[Tieren]

+8 TP
8/30 TP

Here are a few tips for you to improve your training:

1) Focus on the technique - You're typing out your character learning a technique. Your paragraphs of climbing a mountain, eating at a ramen restaurant, helping an old lady, and using the toilet don't have anything to do with you actually using the technique you quoted in your post. That where you should focus your training on.
2) Work on full sentences - Each paragraph was more just one long run-on sentence with no punctuation in between. Think of you writing out a story. Allow the sentences to make sense, and let them build on one another.
3) Use key words from the technique itself - What I mean here is to look over the technique and use key words in what you are doing. It mentions forming a ball of water in your mouth and launching it out. When training, type up what it feels like to have the water in your mouth, to mix it with chakra to form a projectile, and moving your mouth in just the right way to launch it out.
4) Stick to the location you are in - Technically you haven't left the Mist village, but you talk about the lightning village, and Mt. Hiroshima. In order to get to any place like this, you have to actually travel. Since you did not, you didn't get to any of these locations officially. Stick to where you are. If you're training water techniques, the Mist village should be just fine for you.

You can get this training complete. I know you can. Just try to write it out as a story and make it even better!

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do i redo it to get more tp or is that it