Into the cold Fire {Training}

[||Yuuku||]

Interesting, for now i am giving you 6 TP

I like your writing style. It is well done. And its long enough, but i dont see much...training...in this post. Add more training to your next post. We like to see more actual training when you are learning a jutsu like this. But it is well written, i like it.

((6/10)) good job

[Kaori]

Ikamono Chishio (Fake blood)
Type: GenJutsu D Rank
Description: This genjutsu can create fake blood and wounds on the user’s body to fool the enemy that he/she is wounded. The illusion is only visual; it cannot trick the sense of smell.

[[OOC - Thanks, and Suuuure thing. And also..... I accidentally Edited my first post into being nothingness.... And didn't realize it... >.> So I had to delete it....]]

She headed down into the forest quietly, her mockingbird humming on top of her shoulder with a sweet tune in its voice. She had watered the dead plants above her mothers grave, even if that didn't do much-- But hey, she tried. "Moon... Think it's time for real training... Yes?" She smiled, and headed out of the graveyard, wandering around, remembering the GenJutsu she tried to use. Well... Now that I know what it could do... Why not we actually Master the darn thing? The sunlight above shone hot over head, if someone was smart enough, they would see the blood stained on her clothes were fake, as it didn't simply evaporate as quickly as it should. But no-- In her world-- People were just simply mindless.

The forest-- A nice place she happened to appear in every now and then. The birds flickered as she made an entrance in a small grove, the open space filling the void inside of her. She kept still, and ran a hand through the strands of her purple hair, holding her bird on the back of her hand-- It being ready for flight. "Go on sweetie... Go find the next victim..." Kaori urged the pet to go on, and waited down near a tree, sliding down her back, now taking a position so she looked helplessly lost, and bruised. Her eyes stared up at the sky, letting the rays of light hit hard against her forehead-- The sounds of birds chirped around her loudly in mimic, causing her to feel relaxed, and in a good state of mind...

--In yadda yadda's point of view--

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He stood there, seeing the little bird tweeting softly in his ear. "Hm..?" Seemed like the thing was trying to tell him something important... Something urgent... Something in danger. It began to flutter away into the woods quickly. A hunter like himself knew the feelings of animals like those.. And this one seemed to be in a hurry. "I'm coming little guy!" He placed his Kunai in the pouch, and followed quickly, appearing to be in a small grove or somewhat, now looking around expecting to see something out of the ordinary. "Huh? What is to see here?" It was when he turned to the left-- A small girl that looked wounded or bruised lay near the tree not moving an inch-- Her eyes looking still, and death like.

"OMG SHE'S WONDED! MAN DOWN! MAN DOWN!"

--Back in her point of view--

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How blind he is... I can't believe he fell for it... Even when I wasn't intending on letting him fall... She thought as she moved her eyes to spot the man out, his screams being a bit too loud. He seemed to notice her small twitch of movement, and quickly started shouting for help. Wasn't screaming once good enough? "Little girl, are you okay? Are you hurt? You need help. A lot of it. Oh my gawd this is terrible. SOMEONE HEEEELP!" Her left eye twitched, and slowly stuck her hand in the pouch tied to her waist. Call me a little girl? How aggravated she felt at the moment-- Especially when people insult her on size. Her fingers kept to a needle poking the tip of her finger. Yeah... Right...

She quickly moved her hand, pulling out one needle with two fingers, throwing it swiftly toward the mans neck-- aiming directly at the pressure point. It wouldn't exactly "Kill" the guy, but probably paralyze his body for a while. For a while. "Whiles" Seemed to be for a long time. She watched patiently as he fell to the ground, and held out a hand, letting the small mockingbird fly to the tips of her fingers. The stains on her arms and legs diminishing, the Jutsu coming to its end.

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[[OOc - mEEp. =p I hope that's good enough... I don't really know how she's supposed to train with A GenJutsu... Unless I actually do some skipping.]]

[Kaori]

[[OOC - Might as well post again...]]

She came down the road, the blood stains still there, and she knew it was almost over. Quietly she got rid of the Jutsu, and came to a halt as she came to another vast open spot. A river flew nicely down the middle, the trees still, and the silence of the day soothing. Moon flew to her shoulder, and sat there, watching from above. Eventually... She stood on the small grassy land, shifting her feet back and forth, her eyes just glaring down as she concentrated herself on the technique. I'll have to master this... I just need to learn how to control it better...

Her hair flew back as she did the Jutsu again, and her shirt looked stained once more, dripping down her clothes. Moon blew a whistle with horror at the sight. Through her mind she thought about everything... How much she needed to train. This was her one chance to do so. Her father was somewhere in the city, and once she came back, he would probably teach her something Physically active... Like TaiJutsu or whatever. Yet these Illusions seemed to much fun. She came back, running her hand down her shirt, her fingers not exactly touching the blood, more like it was an illusion, or transparent gas.

Then she got rid of it once more again, looking down to see if she done it correctly. With that, she repeated the cycle a few more times as she did so, looking down at herself each time to see if it worked well or not. It ran her out of energy, but she didn't mind-- She could simply... Rest if she needed to. Her mockingbird flew up on the trees branch, whistling for her to stop training. The voice of it seemed to want to push the girl off it, not liking the looks of blood on her clothes. Kaori understood, and nodded. Her Chakra felt drained, and at the point she just had to stop. She slowly backed up against a tree, and slid down, looking into the river which flowed nicely down to the south. Her eyes closing into sleep.

-Sometime later on-

She awakened with the many sounds of people murmuring around her with loud voices. As if they argued about something, maybe worried. "Look! She's alive!" One exclaimed as he put a hand on her shoulder. "Are you okay? You seemed hurt there, do you need to be taken to the Hospital? There is a couple of medics down in the town." Kaori shook her head, and stood up, her eyes scanning the crowd. What a bunch of fools... Well hey. So it did work then. She looked down, seeing she was too tired to even take away the Jutsu. Well, their loss... "Excuse me please... I really must go see my father..." She said sweetly, her bird flying to her shoulder again. "He's waiting for me..."

There she took her exit out of the forest, down to the city where her father was-- Wanting to continue on with the training for something else. He might be able to teach her more than her being by herself...

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[||Yuuku||]

+4 TP

((10/10))

You practice it on people, you use it. And at first it doesnt work...and then it gets better...that kind of thing. Thats how you train a genjutsu. But yeah good job. Your writing is amazing.

[Kaori]

Suguni Ouda (Instant Strike)
Type: GenJutsu C Rank
Description: For this technique the user must have eye contact with the target. A single hand seal is formed and the user vanishes with a loud bang. In an instant the user is standing in front of the target, a weapon (such as a kunai or katana) plunged into the opponent's body. The opponent feels a blast of pain and the shock of being stabbed, but then the illusion of the user vanishes, revealing it was merely genjutsu. This technique means to paralyze the target in temporary terror.

The city... Oh how wonderfully rugged and messy the place was. Her house kept located near a corner alley, and she had to walk a long way just to get there. It was afternoon-- And the sun was then turning into blazing hot rays above her shoulder. It's so hot right now... Home should be a great place to be kept in... Although there was one problem: Her father was there, and whenever she showed up, he always trained her to the max. Well, I guess I need the training anyway... Moon felt a bit different as if the sun turned the sweet mockingbird into a beautifully sweet instrument. Kaori hummed along with it.

She opened the door to the small shack, and took a step inside, feeling a bit cooler now as compare to the outside world. It seemed quiet-- Too quiet. "Hello? Is anyone here?.. Rion?" Kaori called for her dad in his real name. Now a days she didn't ever feel like an actual family... As if the family wasn't even alive. Smiling, she sighed with releif as she heard no sign of existance. "Oh... Thank gawd he's not here..." She headed off to the kitchen, pulling open the refrigerator door, retrieving a bottle of water. Her mind was then relaxed, not worrying any longer, but the trance suddenly broke as a hand was placed on her arm.

"Kaori! Finally you came back! Now, come outside-- I want to teach you a little move I've been trying to teach your brothers. Hopefully you will know how to do it-- They are completely hopeless... Been trying to teach them all during the day." Without her say of it, he dragged her out to the backyard, having a tight grip on her arm. Her brothers sat under the large tree which held many love birds up on the branches. Moon flew away from her, and up to its scurrying friends. "Okay. What I am going to teach you is the Suguni Ouda. Say it with me." Kaori rolled her eyes as he treated her like a child again, and repeated the name with vain. "It's a mere GenJutsu that causes the opponent to pause in fear... Let me demonstrate on you."

She hated it whenever he demonstrated attacks on her... But had no choice. Without even realizing it at first, she saw him come at her, peircing a Kunai into her heart. Her eyes widened from the shock of it-- Feeling un prepared in it. Are you serious?! He just stabbed me! Her eyes frantically searched around, her body not moving at all as she did so. The pain moved from the spot to her arms, and she had no time to react. Panic is something they would call it, and her mind turned into mush-- As if she couldn't think anymore.

A laugh came from a far, and she looked around, seeing her father standing on the same exact spot, his eyes looking like he had a momentary feeling of humor. "Now that's what your opponent will feel when you do this Jutsu correctly. Not such a great feeling, isn't it?" For a second, she felt rage growing up inside of her, but then cooled down, as she brought herself back into the moment. It was her father after all... "Now, try your hardest, Kaori, focus yourself." She nodded, and closed her eyes for a moment, taking in a deep breath. Suguni Ouda.

A loud sound errupted from no where, and smoke came from around them.From an instant she watched as her body came near her fathers, bringing her arms up, and ito her fathers body. The smoke diminished, and she stared from across the feild, trying to figure out what happened. Her eyes blinked as she noticed what really went through. "Uh... Great job Kaori. I mean, it could have worked well if you aimed for me." Seemed like the illusion missed and hit the tree behind him instead, the kunai disappearing from the roots. "You got the hang of it... Just aim the Jutsu at me, don't get sidetracked."

She focused herself again, and repeated what she did, this time keeping all eyes on her father. The loud sound came again, and everything came to a blur. Seeing through the quickness of the attack, she saw her father with the Kunai in his chest. [Or at least being an illusion]. He twitched a bit, as if feeling the shock of pain, but then stopped, grinning. "Great! You got it on your second try! Amazing..." Heh... Yeah it is. She added with a slight smirk, her hand running through her hair. Her father then turned to her two brothers who still looked exausted, sitting calmly with ease. "You two should learn from your sister-- Spend more time outdoors instead of playing around inside... It does bad for your body."

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[[OOC - Thanks for the help! And the compliment! ^_^]]

[Kaori]

Her brothers began to whine as her father practically insulted them on their work, swearing under their breath. Kaori just watched from a far, not being on either side. Sure, the praise may be good for a while, but still—They were her brothers, there wasn’t anything she couldn’t do about it. ”Hey! No whining under this territory!” He yelled at them, and turned back to Kaori, his bony finger pointed straight at the helpless two. ”Now, I want you to try it on them. NOW. Show them what pain feels like.”

Kaori’s eye twitched at her fathers dramatically emphasized order. How freakishly creepy… She thought as she watched him in the corners of her eyes, wondering how she could have came from a crazed up father like him. ”NOW DO IT!” He screamed again, and she rolled her eyes, now facing the scared twins near the trees, her eyes filling with deep sympathy. Her father watched in the side, and all she could do was the Jutsu.

Suguni Ouda The two looked shocked as she began to start it, their arms covering their face in fear. She blinked, and a loud banging noise erupted, loud shrieks coming from their small mouths as they felt the fear of pain. If she were in their point of view, the GenJutsu would have hit perfectly right through one of their bodies quickly, the fake feeling of roaring pain controlling their fears, and actions. The scream seemed to have caused a racket as numerous birds flew swiftly from their nests, squawking in an undesirable manner.

It was pointed at just one of them though, and that one screamed in pain, falling back on the grass stupidly, looking like he just went through a hard electricity shock, staying still one the ground as he dwelled in the paralyzed fear. Kaori stared at him for a minute, her eyes going low as she had to be put their to “Punish” them. “Punishing” Was something she always had to do in the family… And often only did it because her father forced her to. The many times she had trained on the poor boys body and soul was starting to aggravate her insanely.

”AGAIN!”

Her father screamed loudly, and she stared with shock. What a mean soul he was…. But how exciting. Rowdy rascals… Stupid minds—you two should learn not to make him mad! Now staring at the other one which looked like the Jutsu didn’t effect, she repeated it again, ignoring the pleading puppy dog eyes her brother gave him. Sorry… For a moment everything came to a slow motion, and the system repeated again—Her eyes staring directly into his. But the doggy eyes wont force me into a halt…

The cycle went through again, and another loud scream was heard from the fake stabbing. Him, being the more gullible of the two, fell down next to his brother, his eyes staring upward as he teared up from the shock. She lowered her hands, and tilted her head at the whimpering, which sort of reminded her of dying dogs… ”NOW GET UP BEFORE I MAKE YOU GET UP, YOU HEAR ME?” Through the loud screams, she slowly backed up, thinking her training while using siblings as “Logs” Was quite over.

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[mozou]

((+5 and +4, 9/30))