Kamenosuke's Training

[Ijiri Kamenosuke]

Suiton - Kokuun no Jutsu (Black Clouds)
Rank: "C" Rank
Skill: NinJutsu
Effect: A technique in which a user creates a form of black clouds that may be used in conjunction with a Fire type of technique do to the flamible components.
Special: "Handseals"
Drawback: ---
Description: : This is a water based technique. After forming the necessary hand seals, a black mist will emit from the user’s body and rise into the sky. Black clouds will form, releasing a flammable rain of oil onto the targets. The oil is easily flammable and can cause Katon techniques to backfire, hurting the Katon user with the technique instead. Affects Katon attacks used after this technique is used and lasts for two turns or until a Katon technique is used that burns the oil.
Limit: Water Release

It was a nice day in Kiri. A little humid, maybe, but nice all the same. The wind was blowing gently, keeping the too-warm sun at bay for the moment. Kame inhaled deeply, clearing his mind so that he might concentrate on his training. Kokuun No Jutsu would be the technique he trained on this day. It didn't seem like it was too difficult really. It was just a matter of chakra control. Something moved in the corner of his vision. He knew what it was even before he heard the voice; it was one of his many aquaintances. When she spoke, he even knew who it was. Her name was Akuma.

"Whatcha up to today, Kame-kun? More training?"

The young man laughed softly. "That obvious, is it?"

"Mhm. You always come out here when you train. So what justu is it today?"

"Koku--." At this point, Kame turned to look at the girl. Of course, she was gone. It was something that happened often. He would be speaking to one of his aquaintances, but when he looked in their direction, they would be gone. "She had to go already," he wondered aloud. The white haired Shinobi shrugged his shoulders and turned his attention back to his training. Forming the appropriate handseals, he let his chakra flow throughout his body. He could feel it rushing within, spreading to every part of his being. "Suiton: Kokuun no Jutsu." The chakra he had been building until this point changed. He could actually feel it becoming like oil. Slowly, he released it. The result wasn't quite what he had hoped for.

He was dissapointed to find that, although his chakra had done what he wanted it to do, he had released it far too slowly. The oily substance this jutsu was supposed to create coated his skin leaving a slick, nasty looking substance behind. Not only was this disgusting, it was also potentially dangerous. If this were to happen in a fight, it could be a fatal mistake. Especially if the opponent was able to use Katon no Jutsu. Forming another set of handseals, Kame used the nearby pond as the water source for his Suiton no Tate. Controling the water shield, he covered surrounded himself with water, washing most of the oil away, though he was now soaked. That fact didn't really bother him though. The wind was dying down and the heat of the sun had grown more intense as a result. Being covered in water had it's advantages. He released his water shield and began preparing for another attempt at Kokuun no Jutsu.

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+5. Longer, more training. Work the conversation into the story as well as the training. Give more detail.

Also, please keep a running count of the TP you need. So you are currently at 5/30 for this C rank.

[Ijiri Kamenosuke]

[5/30]

"Suiton: Kokuun no Justsu." Again Kame released the built up chakra. This time, the results were a little more desireable. Rather than leaving a film of oil on his skin, a dark, gaseous substnace issued from him and began to gather into a small cloud. Before it was fully formed, however, the wind picked back up, blowing more fiercely than before. The cloud dissipated immediately. "Seriously? I get it at least semi-right and this happens?" He sighed and hung his head in disappointment.

"Just forget it, Kamenosuke. You wont ever get it right. You know that, don't you?" Kame knew this voice too. It's name was Sato. He almost always showed up when the young man was feeling discouraged to tell him how much of a failure he was.

Kame simply ignored him and formed the handseals again. "Suiton: Kokuun no Jutsu." He felt his chakra stir and then fall silent. The Shinobi clenched his jaw. Rather than making progress, he was losing it. Maybe Sato had a point. This jutsu was proving to be a challenge after all. Maybe he really couldn't do it. He shook his head to clear his mind. No, he couldn't let Sato make him doubt himself. He took a couple of deep breaths, shivering as yet another gust of wind blew by, cooling his water-soaked clothing, and began concentrating his chakra again. He closed his eyes, visualizing his charka flow, seeing it as a gentle stream. He focused on that stream, willing it to become stronger.

"Just give up, no one will blame you."

Kamenosuke's eyebrows drew together as he concentrated harder, trying to block out Sato's words. The stream was gathering strength, rushing faster and faster. Keeping his eyes closed, he slowly and deliberitely formed each handseal, speaking the name of each aloud as he made them.

"Why are you denying the inevitable? You are a failure. It's time you face the facts Ijiri Kamenosuke. You will never live up to Ayame. You just aren't made of the same stuff. Don't embarass yourself."

The gentle gurgle of the stream grew louder and louder, drowning out the belittling words. Soon, the roar of a mighty river filled his ears. When he heard Sato mention his sister, Kame's eyes snapped open. He formed the final seal. "Shut up, Sato. You hear me? Shut up! You don't know anything about my sister. You have no right to talk about her!"

The condescending voice fell silent at last.

"Suiton! Kokuun no Jutsu!" This time, the result was explosive. A massive thunderhead burst from his body, fueled by his anger. The drain on his chakra was immense. Kamenosuke fell to his knees, his entire body shaking with both fatigue and rage. The sky was dark above him. He looked up, shocked by the size of the cloud. As he did so, it began to rain. As the thick substance fell to earth, coating everything in it's immediate vicinity, the young man lost consciousness. His last thought as his vision faded was a simple one.

After losing all that chakra...man am I hungry.

[goliath764]

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