Broken~please fix

[Jak]

Name: chewbocaj (Gensou)
Type of Class: Training
Referral Links:narutoforumrp.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=villageofsound&action=display&thread=56514&page=2
Additional Comments: I feel that when it comes to training, i run out of ideas fairly quickly and end up repeating myself a lot.

[Deleted]

Welcome, welcome, welcome!

I see you have chosen the topic of training. Interesting, interesting. I shall be glad to help.

Hmm, yes, repetitive posting is a real nuisance, is it not? I know the feeling; having to write the same words, use the same ideas, give up mid-post when you realize you've stated the same thing twice... I think we've all experienced it.

A good solution is Synonyms, for one. If you read a post from the Blackboard, it will refer you to a brilliant site for that particular purpose. Thesaurus.com will solve most of your synonym-related problems.

Another thing you need is to elaborate. You can use an almost infinite amount of words in a sentence if you are creative enough.

E.g
He kept on practicing before going home that night.
~Could instead be~
He stressed his chakra, pushing himself to his very limits as the sun gradually turned grey, then orange. Finally he gave up as the dark of night set over.

Gensou then began building his chakra for another try, beginning the cycle again and continuing it for the rest of the day.
~Could instead be~
Gensou steadily built his chakra into the sphere formation, hoping to try the technique again. The cycle continued infinitely and (he tried the jutsu from multiple points and angles) throughout the day till the sun decided to sleep.

Do you understand what I mean? Unfortunately, staff aren't really fans of writing out the length of time you practice it for - you must describe, as if you are actually feeling what your character is. Imagine every tiny motion written in perfect detail, every motion of chakra, every bead of sweat - you could get as much TP as you did in your last post by simply saying he practiced for half an hour, but going through more detail. In fact you'd probably get more.

[Jak]

I also seam to have trouble coming up with detail for missions, i feel that my ideas dont seam to come out correctly. i want to go into more detail and create longer posts, but i just can get it right.

heres an example

narutoforumrp.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cityofdante&action=display&thread=58208&page=1

[Deleted]

Longer posts are easy to do. In a nutshell: Be creative.

Now let's crack open that nut.

Emotions are a good thing to describe. Often I find, reading peoples RP (I'm a NFRP stalker *shifty eyes*), that they don't describe enough, or even any, emotion.

Emotion is a complicated and deep thing; without emotion, we'd all be boring robots that didn't do anything. Ever. In RP, emotion is what brings a post to life; you must really enter into your character, feel what they would feel, be angered when they are angered, and picture yourself in their situation.

In a way it's a bit like Drama. While acting you must push aside your own emotions and enter into the person you are pretending to be. It's the same while RPing. You must know who you are, and efficiently tell people everything that drives an action, since obviously you have no pictures. If a picture is a thousand words, it's quite simple: Write a thousand words.

Does this help?

[Jak]

yes thank you, i will try that.

[Deleted]

Mmkay.

Anything else?