:: DWC ::

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OOC:Hey DWC! Well for starters, welcome to my RolePlay school and thank you for applying! Since this is my very first time being a RP Teacher, I am terribly nervous so please bare with me

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Now, since you mentioned in your application that you need work on both training and battling. I have decided to begin your session with your training. What I am going to do is have you learn a technique that I will pick our for you, at random. And depending on what I will grade you once you have finished typing it, will determine what you will need work on. If you have any questions with anything that I have just written here, or anything in general, please do not hesitate to post them in your reply.

The technique that I would like for you to learn is in the spoiler below. All I need from you is for you to learn the technique as if it were a regular training post. Good luck!

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Fuuton: Chibikazekiri no Jutsu (Wind Release: Tiny Wind Drill Technique)
Rank: D
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: The user sends a small burst of wind that spins like a drill towards an opponent.
Special: Handseals
Drawback: It is small, thus not capable of doing a ton of damage.
Description: The user performs the handseals and then extends their right or left arm. From that arm, a small burst of air will escape. It begins spinning rapidly as it moves with speed towards the opponent. It will drill against whatever it hits for a matter of a round before dissipating into nothing. This technique is capable of being used within the distance of ten meters. This technique is considered to be an extensive punching like technique.
Limit: Must have Wind Release

[deadlywhencornered]

(OOC: Thanks for helping me out with this. Sorry I didn't respond very quickly: I'm drowning in a pool of textbooks and homework assignments lol)

Kysuugi had just woken up in his apartment on the 4th floor of his building just as the sun began to set. Watching the sun go down through his window, he whispered to himself, "What a beautiful way to begin my training tonight." He then yawned, stretched, put on his glasses, and got out of bed.

"Now what shall I start off with?" Kysuugi asked himself as he searched through his bookcase filled with training scrolls. He grabbed the one marked "Chibikazekiri no Jutsu" and sat on his bed. Reading it multiple times, he committed all of its contents to memory. He then went through all of the handseals required for the jutsu, slowly at first, and then gradually increasing in speed until he was able to perform them easily and rapidly.

Now, it was time for the fun part. While putting his glasses in his pocket, Kysuugi opened the closet near his bed and dragged a training dummy out into a large, open corner opposite his bed, which, in contrast to the rest of his apartment, was devoid of any debris, furniture, or dirty clothing, except for a few posters thumbtacked to the walls. He then stood opposite the dummy about five meters away in a comfortable stance with his feet shoulder-length apart and his hands very close to one another, ready to perform handseals. Next, he started to think of his chakra as being light, transparent, and airy, trying to visualize what wind would look like in a chakra form. This helped him to use the different releases and switch to each one easily while training.

Kysuugi was ready. His hands erupted in a miniature explosion of handseals. When he finished, he gathered chakra into his right arm and hand and thrust it forward towards the dummy, releasing the chakra in a small burst of wind. However, when the wind hit the dummy, it suddenly dissapated, even though the scroll stated that it was supposed to drill and create a punch-like effect for at least six seconds before it disappeared.

"Hmm...," he muttered while thinking about what he did wrong. Then, he had an idea. Instead of simply thinking of his chakra as wind, he thought of it as being more forceful, spinning like a tornado, as well as being light and airy. With this small epiphany, Kysuugi resumed his stance. Once again he performed his small string of handseals and focused his chakra into his right arm. Then, he forced his arm out, nearly dragging his body with it, releasing the chakra at the dummy. He saw a small disturbance in the air as the wind began to spin rapidly like a drill, just as the scroll described it. However, now, he could only watch to see if he had succeeded or not.

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OOC: Alright. One thing, you did not put the jutsu in your post, nor did you put up the TP count you are aiming to get in the post either. Every training post will need to have those two things in it along with the actual training itself. However, I would have given you a +4 for that technique because you did not do all to much training in it at all.

My suggestion would be to try describing the actual training of the jutsu first instead of describing the area and what your character did before the actual performing of the jutsu took place. Like how did your produce your chakra and how did it form the drill? Did the drill show in your first attempt, if so how distinct was it? Was the wind weak when it was produced? Or did it wallop the dummy when the drill made it's connection?

Please try relearning the jutsu and try adding more description into the actual training. Good work through, keep it up!

[deadlywhencornered]

(OOC: Sorry. I forgot practically everything that I needed. Well, I revised it.)

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Fuuton: Chibikazekiri no Jutsu (Wind Release: Tiny Wind Drill Technique)
Rank: D
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: The user sends a small burst of wind that spins like a drill towards an opponent.
Special: Handseals
Drawback: It is small, thus not capable of doing a ton of damage.
Description: The user performs the handseals and then extends their right or left arm. From that arm, a small burst of air will escape. It begins spinning rapidly as it moves with speed towards the opponent. It will drill against whatever it hits for a matter of a round before dissipating into nothing. This technique is capable of being used within the distance of ten meters. This technique is considered to be an extensive punching like technique.
Limit: Must have Wind Release

When Kysuugi woke up in his apartment, it was already dark out and the stars were shining brightly on his village. Yawning loudly, he got out of bed and put on his glasses; it was time to start training. "Hmm, what shall I look into tonight?" he asked himself as he paroused through his extensive collection of scrolls. Eventually, he selected a scroll containing a simple wind jutsu and began to read it on his bed. It seemed kind of boring to Kysuugi, but he figured it would be a warm up if he were to train anymore that night. He read it multiple times until he memorized its contents completely.

Then, he went through the handseals slowly, placing his fingers carefully so that he didn't cut himself on his sharpened nails. Next, he gradually increased his speed until he was able to perform the string of handseals easily.

Finally, he turned on a fan in his room and let himself feel the breeze it emitted. He closed his eyes and felt the coolness, the intangibility, and the potential force behind it; overall it was a refreshing experience and the easiest way for him to remind himself what wind was, thus getting him ready to perform Fuuton.

Now, he was ready to give the jutsu a test run. Grabbing a dummy from his closet, Kysuugi dragged it out into an empty corner of his room slightly away from the wall. Next, he stood five meters away from the dummy in a comfortable stance, his feet shoulder length apart, and his hands only centimeters away from eachother, ready to perform handseals. He closed his eyes and made the tiger handseal in order to practice controlling his chakra for this jutsu; he focused it in his right hand at first, and then he focused it in his left, both times in the center of the palms of his hands. "Alright Kysuugi,"he thought, giving himself a small pep talk in his mind, "No more practice. Time to do this thing." His mind was pure concentration, his eyes, now opened, were focused on his target so that he didn't miss. He was ready.

His hands flashed in a blur of handseals, shooting the chakra into his right arm. Then, he pushed his right arm out at the dummy, releasing the chakra from his palm as a small burst of loosely coordinated wind. However, it barely even rocked the dummy, and it wasn't drilling at all like the scroll stated it should, simply dissapating as soon as it hit.

Kysuugi, however, was unphased. He simply thought up a new strategy to conquer the jutsu. He closed his eyes and made the tiger handseal once again, this time trying to visualize his chakra rather than focus it. He tried to imagine it as light and airy, remembering what the wind from the fan felt like, but this time he also tried to make it spin, as if he were creating a Rasengan. He imagined tornadoes and typhoons and tried to focus that power and rapid spinning in his chakra.

"It will spin... and drill... it will drill through the air and then drill into my target..." he thought. He was now trying to visualize the effect the jutsu would have on his target. The scroll said it would be like an extended punch, so that was what he imagined. Thus, combining the nature of wind, the spinning of a tornado, and Kysuugi's abilities in punching his opponent, he created the ideal picture of his jutsu.

Kysuugi was ready once again. After focusing his chakra one more time into both his right and left hands, he opened his eyes and focused on where he wanted the wind drill to go, trying to increase his accuracy. Once more, his hands flew through the required handseals, and his chakra began to flow through his right arm and into his right hand, where a miniature wind-drill began to form, spinning slowly, but increasing in speed. After a second or two, which seemed like ages to Kysuugi, the drill was ready, and he threw his arm out, nearly taking his surprised body with him. Seeing the drill create a disturbance in the air, he knew that his technique was going to succeed. The drill hit the dummy square in the chest and started to push it back slowly, as if Kysuugi had punched the dummy himself. However, it would only have been a weak punch, as the dummy wasn't yielding that easily to the drill. After two or three seconds, the drill dissapated, and the dummy stopped moving, sustaining a small mark where the drill had hit.

"YES!" Kysuugi yelled in triumph. The jutsu wasn't finished completely, but he had successfully pulled off most of the requirements for it; now all he had to work on was the distance it traveled, how long it took to create the drill, and how long it lasted. Ready to go all the way, Kysuugi reset the dummy to its original position and walked until he was ten meters away from it. He went through his original thoughts about the jutsu, but this time it was only a review; he "felt" the essence of the jutsu now, and all he needed to do was master it. His hands flew through the handseals once again, and this time a slightly lesser amount of chakra shot even faster through his arm and up into his right hand; he felt that this amount was all he needed. This time, the drill only took fractions of a second to form, and as soon as it did, Kysuugi shot his right arm out at the target with a confident grin on his face.

The drill made even more of a disturbance in the air this time, and it seemed to go much faster than before. Plus, it made the whole 10 meters to the target. When it connected with the dummy, square in the chest like before, the dummy started to move backwards much more forcefully; the drill had gained the power equivalent to a normal punch. It was driving back the dummy slowly, but with ease. After about 6 seconds, the drill had dissapated and the dummy had an even larger mark than his first hit. Kysuugi had finally finished a complete wind drill. It was his first real success in training, and he was ecstatic.

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OOC: Well for starters, I am terribly sorry for my late reply, RL issues is a real time and muse sucker! I haven't really been that active on my Mod account either! Gosh that's bad!

Well, this post is a bit better than the previous one and I would have given you around +8 for it. This is very good considering your first post was graded much lower. It is an improvement and I am pleased. Good work!

You have definitely mastered the length for your posts so the length section does not require any type of work at all. But what I would like to see more is the describing of the technique itself.
Descriptions for a jutsu or technique is a very serious part in training. In fact, my colleagues besides myself (well I believe) look for the describing bit more than anything else. Length and description are the keys to getting straight +10s in training as far as I'm concerned. So if you have both those down, you should be able to train like a pro!

Do you have any questions to what I have said? Or any question that you simply wish to ask in general?
If so then put it in your reply post.

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Let's move on to another D ranked technique and give wind a rest since I prefer to have you receiving grades that are from +8 - +10; Learned. So same way as before, but just different technique. Good luck!

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Raiton • Raikou Yama No Jutsu [Lightning Release • Lightning Bullet]
Rank: D-Ranked
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: The users fingertips begin to glow a light blue as they fire off lightning bolts from the fingertips.
Special: Tiger, Serpent, Dragon
Drawback: After being used multiple times they begin to numb the user’s finger making it very difficult to use weapon’s such as Bows, Swords, or even Kunai. Can be trained multiple times to increase the amount of times that it is capable of using without making finger’s numb
Description: Once the user has performed the required handseals the user will outstretch his hands and his fingers. Chakra will be rapidly gathered their and suddenly each finger will begin to emit electricity. The user will then move their hands back and fling them forward releasing the Lightning Bullets at the opponent. The Bullet’s look like small marble-sized balls of lightning with is giving off a constant discharge. The balls travel as fast as a person can throw a kunai or shuriken.
Limit: Lightning Release