:: Ichirei ::

[F U T A K O N G O]

OOC: Hey Ichirei! Well for starters, welcome to my RolePlay school and thank you for applying! Since this is my very first time being a RP Teacher, I am terribly nervous so please bare with me

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Now, I have read over that single link that you had provided in your application post. (Obviously cause I graded your latest post a few minutes ago) And I have decided to begin with your training sessions before moving on to the harder stuff: Battling. Now what I want from you right now is for you to learn the technique that I will provide for you in the spoiler below. All you've got to do is train like you normally would and we will carry on from there. If you have any questions before we get started please don't hesitate to mention them in your reply.

SPOILER: Click to show

Suiton: Chiisaimizubakahatsu (Tiny Water Explosion)
Rank: “D”
Type: Ninjutsu
Effect: Creates a small wave of water that rushes towards an opponent.
Special: "Handseals"
Drawback: N/A
Description: The user performs the handseals described in special. There, they release chakra into the water and send a small tidal wave (about five feet tall) towards the opponent. The water moves at a speed of about ten miles per hour, so a direct hit from the water can be painful, but not life-threatening.
Limit: Water Release

[Ichirei Hozuki]

OOC- I'm very excited to start my training thank you for responding so quickly.

SPOILER: Click to show

Suiton: Chiisaimizubakahatsu (Tiny Water Explosion)
Rank: “D”
Type: Ninjutsu
Effect: Creates a small wave of water that rushes towards an opponent.
Special: "Handseals"
Drawback: N/A
Description: The user performs the handseals described in special. There, they release chakra into the water and send a small tidal wave (about five feet tall) towards the opponent. The water moves at a speed of about ten miles per hour, so a direct hit from the water can be painful, but not life-threatening.
Limit: Water Release

TP-0/10

"My boy I have another technique to teach you, it's very basic but after you master this the ability to continue onward into more advanced techniques of its nature." -Oroshimo

"Sempai, what is it?" -Ichirei

"Perhaps I shall just show you, come with me." -Oroshimo

OOC- stopping labeling on dialogue

After a short bit of walking Oroshimo and Ichirei reached a small pond.

What is this technique that Oroshimo just isn't wanting to tell me about?

Without a word spoken Oroshimo, using a flurry of handseals, sent a small wave roughly four feet in height across the like at a running pace.

"This is the technique Sempai, but it's so weak..."

"You dare question what I wish to teach you?"

"No sempai, not at all sempai!"

So after a short bit of instruction, Ichirei was told to continually practice the technique until mastered. With a look of determination on his face he quickly molded his chakara, and because of past successes with relaxation and water jutsu, he began relaxing his muscles and clearing his mind. Then after a short while he slowly released his chakara into the water... creating a wave roughly 4 inches high.

What am I doing wrong, I am doing everything exactly how I was taught to do it... but I have failed. What is different between the Hidden Mist jutsu and this one? Is it the way I release the chakara? It has to be! This is a burst unlike how the mist jutsu in which you are supposed to slowly release the chakara.

With sweat on his brow and a grudge on his shoulder Ichirei began to build up chakara in order to produce a wave in the pond. And after a moment of waiting he released all of the chakara in a quick burst causing a 12' tall wave to spring from the surface! However, something didn't feel right.

Oh no, I did something wrong!

And then he passed out

"Wake up my boy you fool! Wake up!"

"Oroshimo!"

"Yes my boy, your lucky I was nearby and knew to shove a food pill down your throat you fool! You almost died of chakara deprivation!"

"I'm sorry sempai... "

"You had better be! You best try again now and figure out what you did wrong!"

With a moment more of rest Ichirei slowly returned to his feet, nervous about the technique and how much it could drain him.

I must have just used way to much chakara, even though that wave would have really hurt when it connected, it wouldn't help if I died immediately afterwards. Man I need some water!

So he jumped into the pond opening his membrane to the water outside, and allowing his membrane to disinfect the water while also replenishing his chakara. After several minutes under the water he rushed to the surface and went to shore, dreading having to retreat from his natural environment. Once he had his feet back on dry land he began to build chakara.

I will not let this jutsu beat me! I will become stronger and this one technique is not going to stand in my way!

With a sudden, dulled burst of energy emitted from his hands, and with a triumphant look on his face he watched as a 5' tall wave moved across the pond. And when he checked his strength, he had lost such a minuscule amount compared to the amount of chakara he currently had that it seemed laughable that only 2 hours ago he had passed out from the same technique.

"You've done it my boy!"

So with the rest of the day Ichirei went through the basic but needed rituals of chakara pool growth. Building up chakara, releasing it and continually letting it rise and fall. Ichrei then returned to his home and rested soundly.

[F U T A K O N G O]

Alright, now if I were grading that technique, I would have given you a +5.

The reason for this is because you talked more in the training and didn't mention the actual training much at all.
I suggest that you try less talking and more describing of your character training the actual jutsu. You could try describing how Ichrei focuses the chakra into the water; how the chakra blends in with the water and how you control it while it is mixed in with the water. Like will the first try make the water ripple? Or will it create a small bump of a wave?

Please re-learn the technique again from the start and try putting more describing into the training and let's see what happens next.

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