I rewrite songs

[Kohaku Dizukou]

this kinda stupid i'm just really board but i rewrite songs so tell me what you think i've rewote two so far...i could do one for you guys if you like...i don't care.

[Kohaku Dizukou]

Original
Vanessa Carlton-Paint It Black

Rewrite
Kohaku Dizukou-Untitled

Song Code

chezmili.free.fr/MySongOfYou/_On%20the%20Road%20to%20Mickey/Paint%20It%20Black%201.mp3

So you and read the words with the song

I see all these people and I want them to die,
All the ones that hurt me, I want them all to die
I see these preppy girls acting like their all cool
If I could I would take them and drowned them in a pool

I see a line of cars and they are up in flames,
Like my eyes and my heart they're burning up in flames
I know people laugh at me and call me alot of names
But one day you watch they'll lose to their childish games

I look inside myself and see I am inside dead
I know this will not end so I'll just stay truely dead
maybe one day my evil dream will finaly come true
Then I will rule the world and theres nothing they can do

I wanna see blood red blood red, in the sky, oh baby
I wanna see blood red blood red, in the sky, oh baby

No more will my brown eyes go turn into a darker black
For now on they'll only be blood red and never turn back
If I look at the sun I see it blowing up
as the fire from it hit the earth and made it burn

I wanna see blood red blood red, in the sky, oh
death in the air,dead bodies everywhere
I wanna see the sun blow up right in the sky
blood red blood red,in the sky oh baby
blood red blood red, in the sky

[Kohaku Dizukou]

Original
Avril Lavinge-Innocence

Rewrite
Kohaku Dizukou- Brokenness

Code
athena.divshare.com/s03/files/2007/05/31/790947/08_Innocence.mp3

Waking up I see that my life still a desaster
This is my life as a broken teenager
Look around i see that nothings has really changed
I feel like I'm locked up in chains

I wanna fly away from it
This is the worse feeling

[Chorus]
This brokeness is hurting me
I have it everyday
This blackness can't you see
It just wont go away
I don't know why
That for some reason
Everyone wants to see me die

Its not fair, Why am I always alone
There not the ones that cry alone at home
They'll see, Their wrong, I'll be a hero here
But till then I'll fly through the atousphere

I wanna fly away from it
This is the worse feeling

[Chorus]

It's the pain inside, that keeps me fighting
It's the brokeness that keeps me living
But It's so hurtful it makes me wanna die
It's the pain inside, that keeps me fighting
It's the brokeness that keeps me living
But its so hurtfull it makes me wanna die

I gotta prove them wrong befor i lay down and die
This brokeness is hurting me
Befor i lay down and die
This blackness can't you see
God make it go away
I don't understand why
That for some reason
Everyone wants to see me die

[Chorus]

[kizer]

I personally hate the cover that Vanessa girl did. You should check out the original version done by the Rolling Stones.

[Kohaku Dizukou]

lol your siggy rocks

[kizer]

I honestly should keep a post count of how many times people tell me that. lolz

[The Asko]

Dude, changing these song so they're all about death and killing people? That's kinda sick. I mean, people like Wierd Al make 'em funny... but this is a tad disturbing.