A few random poems... Looking for Feedback I guess
Jun 20, 2012 16:41:09 GMT -7
Post by fdyu123 on Jun 20, 2012 16:41:09 GMT -7
I'm still working on my character application, but I was taking a break and thought I'd look around. I found this so I thought I might as well share some crap.
Oh yeah, these poems are pretty freaking old, so they might suck.
Our Demons: Written at age 12
Where did my pulse go?
This heart of mine has been unfairly shadowed
By a beast of darkness, son of death
There are no other choices left
But to fall down and beg for mercy
This world needs more diversity
The stars shining in the night
Have been eclipsed by this demon
Blocking out all the light
He’ll stop you from being a freeman
Someone come and save us
Deliver us from this evil
This war is anything but civil
Darkness versus light
You against me
Let’s see who the winner will be
The devil is coming
Barricade these doors
Shine all of the lights upon him
Guide the weaker spirits away
This is our fight
Tonight is the night we face our fate
Open the gate to the end
We shall fight and defend!
Our world is at stake!
This is no time for mistakes
Open your hearts!
This world we shall not depart!
Our time is not up yet
Listen to my voice, listen to my threat!
You have been called by a greater
So stop being such a hater
This world needs some epic saving
End this frantic ‘n mad raving
Make your last days count
Why bother to ask what this is about?
A war has been started
From the underworld
This demon has been departed
Help us now, be a savior
Quite all of this pointless misbehavior
The demon is coming!
You better start running
Before the darkness comes
Pain is consuming us all
This devil is laughing
Come, hear my call!
This world you are abandoning!
Scream!
Our world is falling!
Why are you still dreaming?
Someone end this fight!
Tonight this all ends
Block out the light
WE ALL FALL DOWN
WE ALL GET PUSHED AROUND
BUT TONIGHT IT’S TEN TIMES WORSE
FOR WE HAVE BEEN CURSED
THIS DEMON KILLED OUR DREAMS
STOLE OUR SOULS
AND GUESS WHO HE IS?
He is stereotypes placed on us
He is fear we hold in our hearts
He is memories not forgotten
He is death we have endured
He is our hearts being broken
He is the pain we feel
He is the dreams we had crushed
He is the bullies who make us feel out of place
He is the enemies who spit in our faces
He is EVERYTHING we hate
Our souls to devour he does await
Our hearts no longer need protection
Only if we believe in the good parts of life
Till then, keep dreaming of perfection
It’s not coming
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Rise to the Sky: Written at 12, a bit weird
Open your eyes and soar to the sky
This world shall not keep you trapped
It is only a canvas for upon you to paint
And erase much of its dark taint
This world is dark, fully misunderstood
Incased within an unholy hood
Just keep doing the things that you are
‘Cause boy, girl, you’re a shooting star
Rise to the sky
And keep doing your thing
Cause boy, girl, you’ll make it big
Don’t care if you dance, don’t care if you sing
A heart’s been Broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
Keep trying your best
And someday you’ll beat the rest
Pwn him, pwn her
Pwn ‘em all till you win!
Then go play some Minecraft
Let’s go blow up that
You grab the TNT, I’ll grab the shovel
Tee-he-he I killed this multilevel
Jump up and jump down
Fall back, get pushed around
But we don’t care
So we put our hands up in the air
Come with us if you dare
Go on an adventure
Leave everything behind for this one thing
Chase your dreams till everyone else screams your name
Never try to cast away the blame
Light up the world like a holy flame
Don’t try to treat this dark world like a game
‘Cause if you did it would be such a shame
Low and behold a mighty cry
Feelings inside like you might die
Trying your best to soar and fly
But you’re pushed down by their crazed lies
And every time
You rise up again
Like a trick candle
You relight and dust of the ashes
A burning phoenix, hero of all
Let them be, forgetting to be free
Watch them fall and lose it all
Breaking and shattering their own hearts
Out of the shadows you a victor awakes
A savior you are to make
Not just another stupid fake
This world you shall cause to quake!
A heart’s been broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
Remind the world of its good times
Before the crime, the hate and grime
Forget the wars
Where soldiers died with no reason for
No one remembers the good days
At least it seems
For those who did are lost and shunned
All because we forgot the most important things
WHY IS NO ONE LISTENING?
FORGETTING WHAT MATTERS
THEY SAY THAT WE’RE THE BAD ONES
FULL OF HATE AND STUPID LIES
FORGETTING THEY’RE THE ONES THAT CAUSED THIS!
AND EVERY TIME WE TRY TO FLY
THEY TURN US AWAY
DON’T EVEN BOTHER TO HEAR WHAT WE SAY!
I’m tired of this life
So kid, take my advice
Never forget what these words mean to you
Never stop listening
Never forget to ask questions
Never stop loving
Never forget those who helped you
This world is dark, fully misunderstood
Encased within an unholy hood
But it’s your canvas to paint
And erase its mighty taint
To love it, cherish it, and share it
It gave you your life, now give it back
Don’t make me threaten to attack
We always forget what matters most
Inside we are all lost
Just wandering around in the nighttime frost
Forgetting out traditions and religions
Never bothering to respect the past
Now I always wonder how long
This stupid era will last
I’d rather be changing
You know, rearranging this pathetic place
I know that look on your face
Probably calling me a disgrace
In that silly mind of yours
What a joke, waste of time
A heart’s been broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
Somebody told me
“That this life was pointless
Repeating over and over
Like a broken record
A simple axis turning eternally
Never stopping or heading in another direction
Always needing constant protection
That never comes
All it has is that blasted sun
Forgetting all that has been done
Life is a mystery
So strange and always tricky”
But no one listened to the man
I swear he was almost banned
And kicked out of this accursed land
All for taking a stand
This world has changed
So much
Losing all its touch
Ending so slowly…
A heart’s been broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
This world is dark, fully misunderstood
Encased within an unholy hood
But it’s your canvas to paint
And erase its mighty taint
So do with it as you will
Oh yeah, these poems are pretty freaking old, so they might suck.
Our Demons: Written at age 12
Where did my pulse go?
This heart of mine has been unfairly shadowed
By a beast of darkness, son of death
There are no other choices left
But to fall down and beg for mercy
This world needs more diversity
The stars shining in the night
Have been eclipsed by this demon
Blocking out all the light
He’ll stop you from being a freeman
Someone come and save us
Deliver us from this evil
This war is anything but civil
Darkness versus light
You against me
Let’s see who the winner will be
The devil is coming
Barricade these doors
Shine all of the lights upon him
Guide the weaker spirits away
This is our fight
Tonight is the night we face our fate
Open the gate to the end
We shall fight and defend!
Our world is at stake!
This is no time for mistakes
Open your hearts!
This world we shall not depart!
Our time is not up yet
Listen to my voice, listen to my threat!
You have been called by a greater
So stop being such a hater
This world needs some epic saving
End this frantic ‘n mad raving
Make your last days count
Why bother to ask what this is about?
A war has been started
From the underworld
This demon has been departed
Help us now, be a savior
Quite all of this pointless misbehavior
The demon is coming!
You better start running
Before the darkness comes
Pain is consuming us all
This devil is laughing
Come, hear my call!
This world you are abandoning!
Scream!
Our world is falling!
Why are you still dreaming?
Someone end this fight!
Tonight this all ends
Block out the light
WE ALL FALL DOWN
WE ALL GET PUSHED AROUND
BUT TONIGHT IT’S TEN TIMES WORSE
FOR WE HAVE BEEN CURSED
THIS DEMON KILLED OUR DREAMS
STOLE OUR SOULS
AND GUESS WHO HE IS?
He is stereotypes placed on us
He is fear we hold in our hearts
He is memories not forgotten
He is death we have endured
He is our hearts being broken
He is the pain we feel
He is the dreams we had crushed
He is the bullies who make us feel out of place
He is the enemies who spit in our faces
He is EVERYTHING we hate
Our souls to devour he does await
Our hearts no longer need protection
Only if we believe in the good parts of life
Till then, keep dreaming of perfection
It’s not coming
-----------------------------------------------------------
Rise to the Sky: Written at 12, a bit weird
Open your eyes and soar to the sky
This world shall not keep you trapped
It is only a canvas for upon you to paint
And erase much of its dark taint
This world is dark, fully misunderstood
Incased within an unholy hood
Just keep doing the things that you are
‘Cause boy, girl, you’re a shooting star
Rise to the sky
And keep doing your thing
Cause boy, girl, you’ll make it big
Don’t care if you dance, don’t care if you sing
A heart’s been Broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
Keep trying your best
And someday you’ll beat the rest
Pwn him, pwn her
Pwn ‘em all till you win!
Then go play some Minecraft
Let’s go blow up that
You grab the TNT, I’ll grab the shovel
Tee-he-he I killed this multilevel
Jump up and jump down
Fall back, get pushed around
But we don’t care
So we put our hands up in the air
Come with us if you dare
Go on an adventure
Leave everything behind for this one thing
Chase your dreams till everyone else screams your name
Never try to cast away the blame
Light up the world like a holy flame
Don’t try to treat this dark world like a game
‘Cause if you did it would be such a shame
Low and behold a mighty cry
Feelings inside like you might die
Trying your best to soar and fly
But you’re pushed down by their crazed lies
And every time
You rise up again
Like a trick candle
You relight and dust of the ashes
A burning phoenix, hero of all
Let them be, forgetting to be free
Watch them fall and lose it all
Breaking and shattering their own hearts
Out of the shadows you a victor awakes
A savior you are to make
Not just another stupid fake
This world you shall cause to quake!
A heart’s been broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
Remind the world of its good times
Before the crime, the hate and grime
Forget the wars
Where soldiers died with no reason for
No one remembers the good days
At least it seems
For those who did are lost and shunned
All because we forgot the most important things
WHY IS NO ONE LISTENING?
FORGETTING WHAT MATTERS
THEY SAY THAT WE’RE THE BAD ONES
FULL OF HATE AND STUPID LIES
FORGETTING THEY’RE THE ONES THAT CAUSED THIS!
AND EVERY TIME WE TRY TO FLY
THEY TURN US AWAY
DON’T EVEN BOTHER TO HEAR WHAT WE SAY!
I’m tired of this life
So kid, take my advice
Never forget what these words mean to you
Never stop listening
Never forget to ask questions
Never stop loving
Never forget those who helped you
This world is dark, fully misunderstood
Encased within an unholy hood
But it’s your canvas to paint
And erase its mighty taint
To love it, cherish it, and share it
It gave you your life, now give it back
Don’t make me threaten to attack
We always forget what matters most
Inside we are all lost
Just wandering around in the nighttime frost
Forgetting out traditions and religions
Never bothering to respect the past
Now I always wonder how long
This stupid era will last
I’d rather be changing
You know, rearranging this pathetic place
I know that look on your face
Probably calling me a disgrace
In that silly mind of yours
What a joke, waste of time
A heart’s been broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
Somebody told me
“That this life was pointless
Repeating over and over
Like a broken record
A simple axis turning eternally
Never stopping or heading in another direction
Always needing constant protection
That never comes
All it has is that blasted sun
Forgetting all that has been done
Life is a mystery
So strange and always tricky”
But no one listened to the man
I swear he was almost banned
And kicked out of this accursed land
All for taking a stand
This world has changed
So much
Losing all its touch
Ending so slowly…
A heart’s been broken
Shattered on the floor
Kill the culprit, kick it out the door
Save the world with your rhymes
This world is dark, fully misunderstood
Encased within an unholy hood
But it’s your canvas to paint
And erase its mighty taint
So do with it as you will