Gothalk Aren

[Gothalk]

Basic Information

Name: Gothalk Aren

Bloodlimit: None
Height: 5’11
Weight: 200 lbs
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Birth Country: Land Of Water
Village: Kiri
Special:

Weapons

Primary Weapon:

Secondary Items:

Tactical Vest Type 2

Non-Weapon Items

Character Depth

Personality:

Cold and Distant

Hatred for those privileged

There is truth in pain, and lust for battle.

Motivation at a price

Arrogance, and self-reliance

Death, and Murder

Appearance:

Background:

[Gothalk]

Techniques

Taijutsu:

Krav Maga Style:

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Skill: Supplementary
Effect: By fighting on and on, a Krav Maga Fighter becomes more proficient when an attack may come by. This happens usually when the Krav Maga Fighter becomes unable to see the attack. However by being in combat for so much they can feel when an attack is coming making them less able to be flanked.
Special: ---
Drawback: The user may only learn this technique by the class that they are. This means that in order to learn the "C" Rank version they must be "C" Class, if they wish to learn the "B" Rank version they must be "B" Class.
Description: A technique where the subconscious mind, where the subconscious body reacts just as they are attacked while flanked or while their back is turn. The body reacts in such a way to where they are capable of withstanding so much. This technique makes it where the Krav Maga Fighter is incapable of being surprised attacked, a sudden second sense kicks in as their body screams out to them yelling at them telling them to move, duck, dodge or anything else within that manner. This works on whenever they are being attacked. This technique however has a major flaw. The user is capable of dodging only whenever the opponent's class is equal or lower to that of the rank of the technique they know. This means that a "D" Class user that knows this technique cannot use this against an opponent that is "C" Class or higher.
Limit: Must learn from a Master of Krav Maga.
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Shunshin no Jutsu:

Ninjutsu:


Suiton Release Skills:

Doton Release Skills:

Fuuton Release Skills:

Genjutsu:


Figment Perception:

[|Ayame Unbound|]

Fair warning, reporting posts like this is not allowed. For things to be checked you PM staff members with a link.

Your picture is far too large and stretching the forum, please resize it. Your avatar is far too large as well. It needs to be resized on photobucket or the like before being linked here.

3 paragraphs minimum are required for each writing section.

Those items are not from our indexes. Please use the ones listed in our indexes.

"Basic Sword Fighting Skills" Is not a valid thing. Please use techniques from our indexes or train them later.

you may have one more freebies and two more techniques.

[Gothalk]

Nov 6, 2013 15:40:44 GMT -7 |Ayame Unbound| said:

Fair warning, reporting posts like this is not allowed. For things to be checked you PM staff members with a link.

Your picture is far too large and stretching the forum, please resize it. Your avatar is far too large as well. It needs to be resized on photobucket or the like before being linked here.

3 paragraphs minimum are required for each writing section.

Those items are not from our indexes. Please use the ones listed in our indexes.

"Basic Sword Fighting Skills" Is not a valid thing. Please use techniques from our indexes or train them later.

you may have one more freebies and two more techniques.

Should be ok now, if the dual kodachis are an issue, I can just switch to normal short swords. Im going to need to develop a style for dual wielding them anyway since I don't seem to see any that would fit the style of fighting I have in mind.

[|Ayame Unbound|]

The dual kodachi are fine.

No need to quote the academy techniques. It brings in more confusion since the lowest rank has to be bolded, and you've quoted quite a few techniques you don't actually start with, like anything beyond the basic Henge are considered a technique tree and you don't start with anything beyond the base technique in a tree.

Mark that Shunshin - Push is known only once.

Also a little bit more in personality please.

[Gothalk]

Removed the Academy techs, Marked Shunshin, a further developed personality section. Any other tips are appreciated.

[~Emi~]

It actually looks good now 1/3

But what is your vision of the fighting style you wanted? Maybe we can help you find it.

[N A T S U M I]

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[Gothalk]

Nov 6, 2013 23:04:04 GMT -7 ~Emi~ said:

It actually looks good now 1/3

But what is your vision of the fighting style you wanted? Maybe we can help you find it.

Specifically, something that allows for dual wielding short swords, typically in a reverse grip. Im open minded to any suggestions you have, but as I began to think about what style I would create I would have something that focused on full body techniques in which the legs were used for leg locks and sweeps while the blades are primarily used for slashing, utilizing centrifugal force to both increase power and confuse the opponent.


EDIT:

The more I think on it, the more I want to create my own style regardless down the road, so no worries. Just need one more approval then.

[Zetsumei]

Your paragraphs for appearance are fairly short and lacking in description, please lengthen this.

[Gothalk]

Nov 8, 2013 20:51:43 GMT -7 Zetsumei said:

Your paragraphs for appearance are fairly short and lacking in description, please lengthen this.

Scraped the majority of the section all together and re-did it. I had forgotten to describe the majority of my equipment anyway it seemed...

[KoKoKo]

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