KIDORI KAISHiN [DONE]

[KRATOS]

Basic Information

KIDORI KAISHIN

Alias: Tool of Terror
Nickname: Kido
Bloodline: Kaishin
Age: 18
Height: 6'0
Weight: 154bs
Gender: male
Rank: D ranked
Title: kirigakure genin
Place of birth: Mizu No kuni
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Speciality: Ninjutsu
- ice Release skill
-water Release skill
-earth Release skill
-wind Release skill
-wood Release skill
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TAI specialist
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Tai non-specialist
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Clan non-specialist
-kaishin
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Miscellaneous
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-AnBu Wolf[f]

Weapons

Primary Weapon: longsword - 8,000 ryo

Secondary tems:
butt bag type 1 (overvier)

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Blood Clot Pill x5
Rank: “C”
Type: Secondary "3" Per Slot
Effect: A pill that stops bleeding and accelerates the red blood system.
Special: ---
Drawback: ---
Description: The pill is about 1/2 in diameter about roughly the size of a regular Marble, the color of the pill is a bit darken from all the different herbs that were mixed into it. The pill is able to activate somewhat of a chemical reaction in the body that will trigger the Thrombus or also commonly know as (Blood Clot) is the final product of the blood coagulation step in hemostasis a very important part (the cessation of blood loss from a damaged vessel). A thrombus in a large blood vessel will decrease blood flow through the vessel that has been damage. So that the blood will then thicken and form a clot of blood cells and fibrin strands to stop the bleeding when blood vessel is severed.
Limit: Found in Any Hospital Shop
Cost: 500 Each


Soldier Pill x3
Location: Every Region
Preparation: Ingredient include: Ginseng, Gariig. First you will need to take the Gariig found only in desert regions and ground it up with a mortar and pestle. After it has become fine sand like substance, you will need to set up a bowl where you will then place the Ginseng leaf in. After grinding the ginseng up and mixing it with the ground Gariig, you will need to make the two into a pill. To do this you just mix the powders in water then let them dry molding it into a ball/pill like shape.
Special: Can be made by finding things in nature based off of the ingredients rarity, or found within any medical item shop.
Description: Soldier pills are used to increase stamina as well as chakra, but have the downside of once they wear off (after about 3 days) the user will suffer from severe fatigue and anxiety (probably due to the fact that soldier pills are like supercharged speed). Essentially, after taking a soldier pill, whatever chakra/stamina you have remaining is doubled. It does not increase your chakra/stamina past its maximum, and if you take one when you have full endurance it will actually negatively affect you by giving you a mild seizure. For example: you have 40% chakra left, after taking this pill it increases to 80% left.
Drawback: the effects of the pill will wear off after the thread it was used in is over, or 3 travel days, at which point you will suffer from anxiety and fatigue. The fatigue will make it so all of your movement abilities are halved and you will not be able to perform any techniques equal to or higher then your class level. The fatigued effect will wear off after 10 IC posts. If you take a pill when you have full chakra/stamina, then you will suffer from a mild seizure because the excessive hormones within your body will cause an odd overload in some of your systems which will cause a type of shockwave to your brain. The seizure will incapacitate you for 5 posts, and you will still suffer the fatigue drawback caused by taking the pill normally.
Cost: 3,000 each

Tag: Exploding 80
Rank: "A"
Type: Secondary, 80 per Slot, Expl

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Personality


When it comes to work,Kidori is lazy. He doesn't care what people think about him because he knows himself well enough to like himself. He is getting out of his lazy habits though. Kido is an incredibly loyal individual. Once he swears his allegiance to someone,there is little chance of his mind. When Kidori fights for those he is loyal to,he fights without thinking of his own personal health.

The way he thinks about it,if there is a reason to fight,it is to protect those who you respect.He is seemingly cold and calculating,often found taking up analytical processes so as to allow him to discover the greatest method of advance or strategy. Despite this, Kido has a bit of a quick temper and slight things,many would consider him demonic-minded. Despite that,he keeps cool and control over the situation quite often


An expert tactician,he believes in the value of rational thought. At other intervals,the entity will show signs of hot-blooded rage. Kidori is often seen being rather quiet and reserved. He's not generally one to fly off the handle over anything really and has a high tolerance for annoyances and aggravation. When he speaks he speaks frankly and has been known to be too blunt

He speaks when necessary,and usually the words range from sarcastic and witty to serious and commanding. His voice a rather similar to that of his father,it is quite easy to mistake his comments or outspoken thoughts for imperative statements. He's coldly logical and doesn't factor emotion into much of anything. Kido strives to be in the spotlight whenevee he has a whim to do so,and will do anything for that chance at the limelight. It would be a literal sin to him if he didn't snag a chance at greatness

Violence reports the concepts of religion,corrupt entities,unrighteous laws,and other oppressive bodies,fueling his motives. He often puts duty above all else,which has proved itself a various amount of times. Casual advances have been known to rise to the surface when the subject is in a calm or collected state.

Social status is not truly an aspect of life that he yearns to excel in,often being pushed aside for the greater cause as a shinobi and a warrior of the Kaishin clan. Kidori is genuinely someone who doesn't really care about the world. He could care less which villages are fighting whom or whether his own village is under attack.

Appearance

Kidori is a ninja who relies on his unique Ice and his ability to use magnificent water based attacks. He is a fairy tall man who has light fair skin and a slightly muscular built body, as well as spiky long white hair along with his weapon of choice.

Kidori is considered quite handsome as most girls near his age become very infatuated with him.Those harsh round blue eyes of his possess a natural fierceness that strikes fear in to those who stand against them. An average nose possessing a smaller bridge progresses down from the centre of his eye,maintaining proportion with his slender facade.

Beneath small and hidden nostrils lays thin rose lips,lightly tinted red from the blood flow to the area of his body.Broad shoulders is made up for in his striking distance; able to reach twenty-eight inches without advancing. Kidoris appearance is one that he is comfortable with,not caring if others think it sucks. Starting from the top down,his hair is a bright white color,signifying his favorite color.

An abundance of ripened muscles line his upper body,veins visible upon his arms. Big legs possess great power and acceleration;though lacking in comparison to one proficient in taijutsu. His eyes follow the same color of his hair,being white.

Strangely,his Kekkai Genkai has given his eyesight a rather distinct glow when making with his occuli when underwater. Kidori's pupils seem to have a beautiful luminosity even in the brightest of lights.

He sports an athletic body just like a shinobi should, He strives to get fit. Kido's village outfit is considerably simple. The very bottom layer of this outfit consists of a protective mesh and grey T-shirt. On top of that, he wears a blue coat that has all sorts of decorations on it,mostly notably, a large Kaishin insignia at the back of the coat. He wears this outfit around the village and when training.


History

Kaishin Kidori was born as the first and only child to the Kaishin house of his generation; a prestigious branch of Kaishin that hold an abundance of wealth beyond imagination.

A prodigy in his art he grew up in the shadow of his father,destined to live the life of a lord. His path had been chosen,and it would be free of violence or worries; according to his father "Horin" wealth could buy anything,even peace.

Ignorance only brought pain, Kido learned the true habitude of society through the benevolent words of his mother. She was the only person he cherished to this point in his life,and soon she grew ill. Bedridden with her affliction,the Kaishin youth took her side;giving his all to harbor her to health. At midnight on the third year of her illness,she passed,throwing her only son into depression and loneliness. Feeling a strong resent towards his father,he began to stray from the path set out for him,though he had grown feeble with mental illness. No longer could his dreams be reached,for only nightmares lay in their wake,insomnia had overcome Kidori.

However,as time progressed,he became accustomed to such issues,no longer experiencing physical or apparent drawbacks. After regaining his strength, Kido escaped the Kaishin manor,fleeing on his own to where he would seek sanctum.

Meeting with the commendable Mizukage at the time,he would explain his situation and his desire to become a shinobi of the Mist. In early genin days,the shinobi was sent on a salvage mission somewhere near the land of water with his jonin leader. An infiltration team had become caught in the fray and was struggling to flee,being force to fend off an influx of bandit ninja. It was his contingents responsibility to assist in the escape of the infiltration shinobi. Upon arrival, the streets of the water nation were stricken with chaos though they managed to locate their comrades and come to their side,with Kidori's proficiency in Ninjutsu,he provided great support allowing his comrades to continue to withdraw.

When they were almost out of sight from the bandits,a body of bandits ambushed them nearly killing several including Torze (jonin). With quick reactions and a series of handseals, the man soon to be titled 'Vulture' had pieced together an elaborate trapping. His grounds of execution consumed the many approaching ninja and allowed time for him and his comrade to escape.

With Torze severely injured,he couldnt move and Kido was so tired he couldn't bare carrying Torze. If was do or die, it was either he stayed with Torze giving him support and letting the backup squad of the bandits to kill them, or either eliminate Torze and fleeing in the process. He left his master leaving him for dead and decided to keep this secret but seek peace throughout the Mist.

[KRATOS]

Starter Techniques

Suiton Soushi (Water Creation)
Rank: [“D”], “C”, “B”, “A”, “S”
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: With this technique the user is able to create water from oxygen in the air for water techniques. When this water is created they can then manipulate the size and shape of the water, controlling it within their radius.
Special: This jutsu can be used as a source of Suiton jutsu without additional handseals.
Drawback: If the water is made for use outside specific jutsu or to manipulate the size/shape of water in their radius, then this jutsu requires handseals.
Description: By using their chakra a Kaishin member can manipulate the molecules in the air and allow them to take the shape and form of water. In doing so the user is capable of performing techniques that require a water source. The amount of water that can be made, as well as the radius depends on the rank of the jutsu. For D rank the user can create up to four cubic meters of water in a radius of four meters. At C rank eight cubic meters and a radius of eight meters. At B rank seventeen cubic meters of water in a radius of fifteen meters. At A rank thirty two cubic meters of water in a radius of twenty meters. At S rank fifty two cubic meters of water in a radius of thirty meters.
Limit: Must be of the Kaishin Bloodlimit. Must have Water Release.


Aisu Soushi (Ice Creation)
Rank: [“D”], “C”, “B”, “A”, “S”
Skill: Ninjutsu
Effect: With this technique, the user is able to create ice out of any source of water around them.
Special: This jutsu when combined with Suiton Soushi can be used as a source for Hyouton jutsu without additional handseals.
Drawback: The water source must be within their Radius. When controlling or Creating Hyouton outside of Hyouton jutsu then the user must perform the required handseals.
Description: By using their chakra a Kaishin member can lower the temperature around a body of water at an incredible rate to freeze the water into ice instantly; allowing for ice techniques to be used. In order to go into a rank of this technique a member must first learn the water creation technique of the same rank. If one wishes to train into the C rank Ice Creation they must first learn the C rank Water Creation technique and so on. The radius at which ice can be made depends on the rank of the technique. At D rank four meters radius. C rank eight meters radius. B rank fifteen meters radius. A rank twenty meters radius. S rank thirty meters radius.
Limit: Must have Water Creation Technique rank by rank. ex: D for D, C for C, etc. Must have Ice Release. Must be of the Kaishin Bloodlimit.


Kuri Buki (Ice Harden)
Rank: [“D”], “C”, “B”, “A”, “S”
Skill: Ninjutsu/Supplementary
Effect: In Description
Special: N/A
Drawback: Learning the ranks of the jutsu requires the specific class to be achieved.
Description: The understanding of this technique allows for a Kaishin user to truly harness the power of ice creation. This technique will determine how hard ice created is. The user must be the same class as the rank of jutsu they wish to learn. This means to learn the B rank version of this technique the user must be B class or higher and so on. At D rank the ice is as solid as regular ice. At C rank the ice is as strong as iron. At B rank the ice is as strong as titanium and cannot be melted with fire techniques below A rank. At A rank the ice is as strong as hard steel and can’t be melted by fire techniques below S rank. At S rank the ice is as strong as adamantine and cannot be melted by fire techniques. This technique is the base of all ice techniques used. The strength of every ice technique depends on this.
Limit: Kaishin Bloodlimit; Water Creation, Ice Creation

[Father 'Suke]

A few touches need made

• I assume the six releases you chose are the six freebies you receive, this is more so just me clarifying with you that those six are the freebies you want.
  
• 1 paragraph is five sentences. I need to see a minimum of five paragraphs in all three of your writing sections please.
  
• In the clan non-spec, can I see you put Kaishin in there please.
  
• For your secondary items, can I see the prices that go with those items? In total you receive an allowance of 30000 ryo so you can go all out on your secondary items if you wish so long as you don't go over the allowance.
  
• You have listed into your bio 5 techniques, 3 of which you labeled a rank up so that's putting you at 8 techniques. You have a max start off of 3 techniques as a bloodline character. Please remove techniques as needed but remember as a kaishin you must start off with: Water Creation D-rank and Ice Creation D-rank as a minimum. You may have one more technique outside of these two to start with or raise one of them to C-rank. Your choice.
  

[KRATOS]

Done

[Father 'Suke]

• Beastmaster and Companion are the same thing.
  
• Animalist is now "alchemist"
  
• Summoner I believe you are referring to "mythical Summoner" correct me if I am wrong.
  
• Are you not buying any goggles or other accessory for your vision enhancements to go to immediatly?
  
• For Zoom Vision, please label the number of times bought and not just the letter rank. Since B-rank can consist of a price between 3000 to 7000.
  
• Personality: [6+2+3+2+3+1=] 17 sentences if I am being picky. Overall even with that said there are too many squeemish paragraphs even if you squish the fragments together. Please beef it up.
  
• Appearance: [2+3+2+2+2+5=] 16 sentances if I am being picky. Overall even with that said there are too many squeemish paragraphs even if you squish the fragments together. Please beef it up.
  
• History: In your history you reference Otogakure and infiltrating it. First off you would need to know the location of the village which you wouldn't be able to know fresh starting out. Please fix this. Another part of the history concerns me is the part where you "decided not to return to leaf but seek refuge in another village." This denotes you wanting to probably start as a missing nin which isn't possible here nor again can you start with any village location knowledge save for your starting village. Which as a "leaf genin" would be Leaf Village.
  

[KRATOS]

Can we start grading now? I'm done and that's too much writing

[Deleted]

No such thing as "Too much writing" here buddy. Still, ease into it. Don't try to write everything at once early on, before you're used to it. Just know that you won't be approved as-is. Once you've complied with Ryosuke's instructions you'll have a 1/3 from me. Or more accurately a 2/3 after his own 1/3. At least it looks like you've omitted any reference to knowledge of the locations of other villages besides your starting one, which is good. Note: You can only know one location by memory at a time, but you can effectively "forget" your previously memorized village any time you locate a new one to remember that instead. Of course that complicates getting back home, so it's a good idea to buy an mark maps before you go exploring with any seriousness. Lots and lots of maps.

That said, I note that you now have a pair of goggles, and seem to be applying your vision enhancements to it. So that issue is resolved. Note: It isn't actually mandatory to attach them to any device in terms of owning them, but you wouldn't be able to USE them until then, which is why Ryosuke brought it up.

One purchase of the zooming vision would only be a c rank item, being nitpicky, increasing to B rank at 3 purchases (3,000 Ryo). So either buy more if you have the budget for it, or reduce the rank. It's not terribly important in the grand scheme of things right now, but a flawed label could prove misleading.

and for your "companion" which im assuming is Beast Master, you might want to specify that, since there are 3 sets of animal companion obtainment:

1) Any character may have up to 2 common or uncommon animal companions in any combination (common+common, uncommon+uncommon, common+uncommon) without needing to use a beast mastery.

2) any character in the clan inuzuka may have up to 6 animal companions of any rarity as long as they are canine, and may never have a feline animal companion. ever. this is in addition to the two common or uncommon animals everyone is allowed to have.

3) any character who sacrifices a miscellaneous slot for beast mastery may have up to 6 animal companions of any rarity with no further restrictions. unless of course, they are also an inuzuka, in which case they may not have any feline animal companion. this is in addition to the two common or uncommon animal companions anyone is permitted to have.

i think that about sums it up.

[KRATOS]

Done now, shall we start grading

[Yoshi [Lynx!]]

Please add in parenthesis which regions your maps, books and the like are from. As an example, if you want your map to show an overview of the land of fire, it should look like this:

SPOILER: Click to show

Map: National (Hi no Kuni)
Rank: "B"
Type: Main, Book, Scroll, Map
Effect: A map of a specific Nation (Country).
Special: ---
Drawback: ---
Description: National; entire kingdom. National Map's dimensions are 40 inches by 24 inches. National Maps list the City Capitals, and "B", "A", and "S" Rank Cities of the Nation. National Maps list Major Trade Routes, Regional Locations, and Regions that reside in the Nation. National Maps lists the Oceans, Bays, Major and Minor Lakes, and Major Rivers that reside in the Nation. The Maps may be folded and can fit inside Map Holders found in Vests.
Limit: These items may be bought inside any Book Shop within that Nation.
Cost: 4,000 Ryo Each

We also need to know the quality of the items you have to understand fully what the pricing of your items are. (Wheter you're above or below allowances, etc) The discerning quality information can be found here.

When those things have been updated completely, the profile is ready for acceptance. I've found no other significant mistakes.

Love, Yoshi.

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Done, I think

[Ancestor Febrie]

You have a continent map, for their names you should look here since Hi No Kuni is not a continent.

Known World map doesn't need a name next to it.

You're also missing 6 freebies, if that was intentional then leave it at that however I'd suggest using them especially on traits since you won't be able to get them later on. (Freebies are Releases, Perceptions, Stances, Skills, or Traits)
NVM I see them in the special section.

[KRATOS]

Thanks! Hooray I'm finally done

[Nira]

Maps are main items, not secondary. You're over your allowance.

List what city for a local map.

[KRATOS]

How much Ryo do I have now? I'm done people

[Nira]

13,000 ryo to start with for main items.

[KRATOS]

I'm done now. Back and forth it has been, but I'm done finally

[N A T S U M I]

1|3

[Nira]

Please make it more obvious that the releases were obtained with freebies, since the special section does not always mean that the associated releases/perception/stances were learned for the listed style.

Once that is done, you have my 2/3.

[Gohan]

I don't think you can start with the shirayuki since it is a special weapon

Source (see last post)